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Silent Darkness; ickyness at its best (... worst)
Topic Started: Aug 5 2005, 07:35 PM (67 Views)
Rychan87
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wrote this one random day in spanish class last year...

small note: its not nearly as good as everyone else's here though.

Silent Darkness

Wandering in the silent darkness,
Wishing it were only night,
Calling to the nearest creature,
Only to remain unheard.

Drifting in the silent darkness,
Losing myself on the way,
Grasping for the nearest creature,
Only to remain untouched.

Reaching through the silent darkness,
Looking for a simple light,
Watching for the nearest creature,
Only to remain unseen.

Waning through the silent darkness,
Waiting for my waking moment,
Searching for the nearest creature,
Only to remain in the silent darkness.


my favorite part of this one is the fact that you can take the first word of the first three lines in each verse and it still gets the point across. ^^

wandering, wishing, calling, drifting, losing, grasping, reaching, looking, watching, waning, waiting, searching... only to remain in the silent darkness.

otherwise... it basicly sucks ^^;;
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Matt
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It doesn't suck, ut's really good! :D
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Lustre
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That's really cool how you did that. I thought it was really good.
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Genie
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Rychan87 your such a dodo! For even thinking your poetry isn't as good as members who post theirs here! I love the technique, I love the repitition of "darkness" great poetry, hope to see more soon!
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I like it :)
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