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Truly yours,; sorry..
Topic Started: Jun 15 2005, 01:50 PM (76 Views)
Genie
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At any distance,
I will hold my hand out to you-
unfolding my palm
All you have to do...
is grasp it tight!

When you do,
up my arm,
to my heart,
pumped around my body,
will be life's greatest gift,

You are my oxygen,
my life,
with every touch,
with every glimpse
with every smile
with every blink-
My heart will pump...

Im,
Truly yours,



Im sorry everyone, im really emotional so my poetry sucks horribly, I shouldnt post it really, ignore this one and the rose one ;cry;
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Silver
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I really liked this! I think that you really feel what you write--you're not just putting words down onto paper to make them sound good. I especially like this part here:
I will hold my hand out to you-
unfolding my palm
All you have to do...
is grasp it tight!

Very good poem, keep at it! :)
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Genie
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Silver,Jun 15 2005
11:41 AM
I really liked this! I think that you really feel what you write--you're not just putting words down onto paper to make them sound good. I especially like this part here:
I will hold my hand out to you-
unfolding my palm
All you have to do...
is grasp it tight!

Very good poem, keep at it! :)

aww wow thanks, im glad I please you with that poem, its not my usual kind of poem you see,
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~*Dani*~
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It's really good, even though it's not your usual kind of poem. But sometimes trying different things works out. It did for you :)
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Genie
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~*Dani*~,Jun 16 2005
06:12 AM
It's really good, even though it's not your usual kind of poem. But sometimes trying different things works out. It did for you :)

Glad you realised that. :) , it isnt, but I took like 5 minutes approx on it because I wrote it for someone, and I thought it sounded not me, but hay, thanks a lot!
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Lustre
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I will never ignore any of your poems Henna. You are being too critical on yourself. That is a very emotional and devoted poem. Awesome!!! :)
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~*Dani*~
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I agree with every word^ Your poetry rocks! :D
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Lustre,Jun 16 2005
05:37 PM
I will never ignore any of your poems Henna. You are being too critical on yourself. That is a very emotional and devoted poem. Awesome!!! :)

AWW THANKS DANI AND LARRY! Matt loved it.. :o
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genie,Jun 17 2005
10:16 AM
AWW THANKS DANI AND LARRY! Matt loved it.. :o

well if Matt loved it, that's all that matters :)
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Lustre,Jun 18 2005
08:12 PM
genie,Jun 17 2005
10:16 AM
AWW THANKS DANI AND LARRY! Matt loved it.. :o

well if Matt loved it, that's all that matters :)

Tha hon,
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~*Dani*~
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Im glad Matt loved it. :)
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