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tried something new...; symbolism...umm...
Topic Started: Jun 13 2005, 05:57 PM (73 Views)
~*Dani*~
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My grandma inspired me to write this by coming up with the title, which im not too sure of.

My Mind is Always Working

My mind is always working in every single day,
what to write, what to draw, when to nap, what to play,
my mind is a tool such as a carpenter's saw,
it takes things and cuts them from when they are raw,
my mind is like sandpaper smoothing beautiful curves,
but once in a while, the perfection gets on my nerves,
my mind is an ax, chopping it's way through,
all of my thoughts, the old and the new,
when I think of the life that i'm living,
all the love and the care and the hope that im giving,
there's one thought I know I could think of at least,
my mind is creating my life,
my own masterpiece.

Eh, in my opinion it's not my best...what do you think?
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Lustre
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Dani, you have a great way of expressing how you are as a person, and the way you are growing as a person. I liked it. :)
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Genie
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Well hon, you made me smile, your a total success!
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~*Dani*~
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Thanks everyone. Before i joined here, i never believed i was a good poet. But now, your appreciation has me shifting in the other direction. I love comments, but suggestions help build me into a better writer. However, sometimes comments just keep me going. Thanks guys! :)
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Lustre
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keep writing Dani, you have found a talent you have :)
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~*Dani*~
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You have no clue how good you just made me feel...thank you so much...
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Aislynne
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To Lustre - no truer words have ever been spoken.

To Dani - I love this poem. It has a chaotic feeling to it, but completely relatable also. My favorite lines are these:

my mind is like sandpaper smoothing beautiful curves,
but once in a while, the perfection gets on my nerves,

*Claps* You're an awesome writer. Keep on writing, it'd be a shame if your talent went to waste. ^_^
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Lustre
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awwwww, you're welcome Dani

so much talent on these boards, with Dani, Aislynne and Henna in poetry and mims in graphics, it would be a shame if you let that talent go to waste.
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~*Dani*~
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It would also be a shame if i didnt have your comments. You guys are great :)
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Aislynne
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Aww, group hug *hugs*

That's what we're here for ^_^
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~*Dani*~
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You're all very sweet. :)
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