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Maybe She Learned; uhh...temporary title...
Topic Started: Jun 13 2005, 05:46 PM (98 Views)
~*Dani*~
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she's a rich girl
and she's got all those stylish things,
designer clothes
and a cell that always rings,
because the girl at school
thinks that rich girl is cool
and wants to know where she gets all the bling,
but when tragedy strikes
who will be at her side?
noone, that's true,
noone ever really tried
to get to know her better
to find out who she really was
and this is all because
she was a rich girl
but she didnt know a thing
other than all her stuff
like all that stupid bling,
she was a rich girl
and when those things,
the fire fried
she went down on her knees
and she prayed and she cried,
but maybe something good
came out of those blues,
maybe she learned that friends
should be loved
and not used,
maybe she learned from that internal strife,
things are for buying
but you cant buy your whole life.
^EDITED^
Comments, suggestions, concerns and any other things i cant think of right now are welcome!
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Aislynne
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Wow. I love it. I wrote a poem sort of like this called "Sweet Tammy" but it heads off into a completely different direction. Besides, this is much better anyway. I love the last two lines.
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~*Dani*~
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Im sure your poem is just as good, if not better. Yea, the last two lines are probably the best part of the whole poem.
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Genie
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Love the title! You girls are great with titles Dani and Aislynne! However opinion based I always think slang words such as "cuz" spoils poetry, only if your doing a rap or something similar they sound good, still I love your last line and your first line, again both of you rock at your starting and last lines! I look forward to more poetry from you BOTH! :)
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~*Dani*~
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Well, it does kind of sound like rap...I have to agree with that...perhaps sometime i could alter some of the words in a way so that the poem could still be the same overall in it's meaning, but without slang.
Thank you all for your wonderful comments! :D
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~*Dani*~
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Sorry to double post, but I submitted this to a contest a while back and I got big news in the mail today. It said:
League of American Poets
Danielle, thank you for sending us your poem. We would love to publish your work in our new anthology. I know your poetry will enhance the book and inspire others.-T.G. Starks
:D Woooooooooooooooooooooo!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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~*Dani*~,Jun 27 2005
12:32 PM
Sorry to double post, but I submitted this to a contest a while back and I got big news in the mail today. It said:
League of American Poets
Danielle, thank you for sending us your poem. We would love to publish your work in our new anthology. I know your poetry will enhance the book and inspire others.-T.G. Starks
:D Woooooooooooooooooooooo!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Congratulations Dani ;up; That is awesome!!! Good job :) Bet that made your day :D
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DeE
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Omg, congratulations, Dani. That is awesome, and very nice poem.
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~*Dani*~
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Thanks Lustre. Yeah, it did kind of make my day. :) Thanks Dee :D
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Kaos
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Just a hint, chaps, watch out with these poetry anthologies etc.

http://www.eliteskills.com/writing_scams/w...g_scam_list.php

Always check this list, and search for the competition or site in google in connection with the word "scam". Many many sites around today are only interesting in fleecing unsuspecting writers. Vigiliance is key.

Remember: If a site/competition want you to pay for whatever your work is published in - think twice.

Sites like www.poetry.com and www.poetryamerica.com are pure scams, publishing all and any poem that's sent into them to con their authors out of money. They publish hundreds of anthologies, with thousands of poems crammed into each, making a huge profit, and charging often around £50 for the anthology. Do the math - a thousand poems per book, each poet paying £50 - £50000 right there for them. And they publish dozens a year, with far more than 1000 poems in each.

EDIT: In fact, I'm going to post about this in its own topic, and pin it in this forum, as a warning to all.



However, that's a very nice poem Dani :) Reminds me of the Nickelback song "Money Bought"
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Genie
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Wow thanks Chris Ive joined one of them, but werent planning to publish from them <_<
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~*Dani*~
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I didnt know that. My mom wants to get a book anyway. Maybe I should tell her. Thanks for the advice and the review Kaos. :D
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