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| First Poem From Meh; Be prepared..it's weird.. | |
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| Tweet Topic Started: Feb 21 2007, 08:30 PM (202 Views) | |
| Pyro | Feb 21 2007, 08:30 PM Post #1 |
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The Worst Night/The Night I Lost You She's turned away Afraid of what she sees Please don't say It's all because of me The beer, the drugs I hope to God you'll be okay All I want now is one of your hugs With the chaos, we got lost inside the fray Gunshots were heard and blood was spilled The night was lost and with it went you I stood and watched as body bags were filled Wishing there was something I could do Remembering what you said, now I see The only thing I ever truly loved was you It's sad to see what drugs did to me.. For those of you who didn't get it, there's a couple who go to a party; the boyfriend does drugs and alcohol because he feels there's nothing to love in life and he's got no purpose; then some crap goes down because people are high and drunk; people get shot and die and his girlfriend gets shot (I didn't specify if she dies or not so you decide); then he realizes that she's the only thing he loved and how screwed up his life got when he used drugs and whatnot. Yup. I know. It sucks but it's one that I could find that was at least decent and wasn't full of violence. If you wanna comment go ahead. |
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| The Goddess Alexia | Feb 24 2007, 11:34 AM Post #2 |
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"Eppur si muove"
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we don't rate here, so no worries about that
I like it...I think it could be just a TINY bit more structured, but I'm not really one to talk because I don't like structure in my own poems either lmao... but even so, don't make excuses if you tink it sucks and yo're tring to warn or brace yourself for an onslaught of "crappy-poemsnessism" because who fucing cares what we think. Its your powm isn't it? You wrote it to express some form of yourself, and so 1. you should be proud of it, and 2. you opinion is the only one that really counts. But even so, like i said, I like it. |
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| Pyro | Feb 24 2007, 11:36 AM Post #3 |
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Haha, thanks.
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| The Goddess Alexia | Feb 24 2007, 11:43 AM Post #4 |
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"Eppur si muove"
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lol no problem. |
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