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Davallia
Topic Started: Jan 12 2011, 09:15 PM (573 Views)
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Name: Davallia

Weight: 86 lbs

History & Origin: Davallia was born to a Zuet father and a rabbit mother in Redwood Ravine. When she was born, she was the only female in a litter of four. Her father was especially proud of her, but her mother wasn't, and Davallia lived in a shower of hatred. Fights broke out between her mother and father, and every time they fought, her father took her side. Many years later, at 17, she left her parents' little clan to live on her own.

RP Sample: Chocolate-tipped auds were perked, mahogany tail swishing to and fro. Crimson eyes watched the pack from afar, seeing the pups playing, and watching the alpha speak with her packmates. Everything seemed so simple to her. So easy to understand, yet so dangerous if they got into trouble. She was a friendly Zuet, that was true, and she wanted to ally with this pack. They'd need her help more than ever if they were attacked, and she was more than happy to oblige.

Age: 19

Gender: Female

*Edit: Okay. I did a little bit more. I changed her history, so that she left her parents at an older age of 17. Now she is 19. I hope this works out. If not, please, please, PLEASE let me know! I love getting feedback!*
Edited by Clemency, Jan 17 2011, 12:35 PM.
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What's Working: She's got a cute personality, very fitting for her age.
Corrections Needed: That is one DARK design. Black is Extremely rare in ZHs, we suggest to most people that would like darker markings to try out a darker version of their base color, instead of pure black.
Overall Impression: I really like her personality, but the near lack of contrast in her colors kinna strains the eyes. I would recommend lightening your base color just a hair, and having darkened base colored markings. the light design really agrees with her personality in my opinion. cuuute. :3 i like that you left the greenish tint in her markings too, i like it next to the red mane and tail. :3
Vote: Yes
Edited by Box, Jan 14 2011, 09:05 AM.
My RWR Alts are:Box the Zuet HekogDevaru the WolfTrample the TanciRah in Fu Enle Beta in Acwellan Lone Tanci
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What's Working: i like the ear tip and stocking color.
Corrections Needed: Agreeing with box the design is rather dark, and lightening up would be nice. Also, from what i've gathered the ZH gene is rarely passed when mating with other species..i'm not sure if that will pose as need for corrections but throwing that out there.
Overall Impression: I'm not saying that i don't like it, i'm saying somethings do need to be changed in my opinion.
Vote:pending
Edited by Akebia, Jan 13 2011, 10:32 AM.

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Alrighty. I changed the colors dramatically because when you said 'lightening up', I was like, 'Oh my goodness' and Siamese markings popped up in my head. So I redid the ref, and changed the RP sample a bit to match it. Also, as I had mentioned before when I edited the app, those light parts are not streaks. They are simply lighter because the sun is shining there x3
Edited by Clemency, Jan 13 2011, 08:36 PM.
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Cuuuuuuuuuuuuuute. I love the changes! See my vote post for edits.
My RWR Alts are:Box the Zuet HekogDevaru the WolfTrample the TanciRah in Fu Enle Beta in Acwellan Lone Tanci
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What's Working: I really like her color design. Very pretty combination. I like her history.
Corrections Needed: She's very young to be on her own. Because ZH live so long, they mature mentally a bit slower than humans.
Overall Impression: Good
Vote: Yes
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