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Waking For A Rose; My Attempt at a Novel
Topic Started: Oct 26 2011, 09:31 PM (203 Views)
ShadowSaber1
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Hi all.

Hopefully I have started this topic in the correct place.

I recently wrote my first novel and I am working to eventually get this published but according to a publisher, it still needs alot of work.

Apparently I need to "show the story not tell it," but I have no idea what they mean.

They quoted the following phrase, "Don't tell me the moon is shining, show me it reflecting off a piece of broken glass."

Added to this is that the majority of that particular publisher's authors write in a style similar to Agatha Christie, so found my style to be somewhat immature by their standard.

All I ask is that if I were to post a few chapters on here (Google Docs) could someone read them, and let me know what they think.

If you think it is crap, then say it's crap.
If you think an area needs improving, then tell me where.
If you think it's great and you want to read more, let me know.

Any help or reviews are more than welcome, negative or positive.

And now a brief blurb of the book.

"Eric Warner is asking questions.

Trapped in a coma, while his body sleeps, his mind is alive. He must follow a path, find himself and return from the brink before he can discover what lies before him and understand what lies behind him.

Led by Eldred, the mysterious voice in his mind, he sees the meaning of his existence and what he must do to meet his fate.

Events are revealed that make little sense but as his strength grows he sees the truth. He's not alone, someone he's known his whole life, and another who has watched him since before he was born. Eric will suffer heartbreak and near death but hiding in the shadows, something dark and sinister awaits. Plagued by doubts, haunted by visions, unsure of his strength, one single question dominates his thoughts.

What is rose?"

Thanks in advance.

Chapter One

Chapter Two

Chapter Three

Chapter Four

If admins will permit me to, and if anyone wishes me to, I will upload further chapters in due course.
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You may want to find somewhere else to put these, I can't get access to them without signing up for a Google Docs account.
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Ok,

Urm, deviantart?
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ShadowSaber1,Oct 26 2011
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Ok,

Urm, deviantart?

That'd probably be fine. Be sure not to lose any of your formatting though; last time I checked, dA's text-uploads were pure text only.
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Pixellated,Oct 26 2011
09:35 PM
ShadowSaber1,Oct 26 2011
10:34 PM
Ok,

Urm, deviantart?

That'd probably be fine. Be sure not to lose any of your formatting though; last time I checked, dA's text-uploads were pure text only.

Yeah, I have to go through each line and add html code <i> and hard return everything.

Good Fun

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Deviant Art it is

EDIT:

Holy crap, this took forever to add the HTML code. As you can see certain sections are italics, then not, then italics. My fingers are sore!!

Chapter One - DeviantArt

Chapter Two - DeviantArt

Chapter Three - DeviantArt

Chapter Four - DeviantArt
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