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| Dire Peril; An "Exterminatus Now" fan fiction | |
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| Tweet Topic Started: Dec 9 2004, 10:40 PM (7,826 Views) | |
| Lothar Hex | Jul 10 2007, 11:36 AM Post #101 |
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Illogical
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You mean RED'S storyline, right? |
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| Pixellated | Jul 10 2007, 11:38 AM Post #102 |
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Being responsible
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Yeah, I know. I was going to write Red's, but the part I was drawing was mine. *goes back to fix* (Oh, and thanks for the audio rants link, I'll have a listen now that my internet has returned) |
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| Lothar Hex | Jul 10 2007, 11:59 AM Post #103 |
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Illogical
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Just actually reading through the whole thing again sincew it's been ages since I did. |
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| RedFox742 | Jul 10 2007, 08:06 PM Post #104 |
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Obama's got a gun...
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It's (mostly) his storyline after I've let-off, and the entire thing with Rogue's multiple-personality issue is his, so, yeah, it's legit to say that art goes with Pixel's story. You may hear from me again on this story, though..... |
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| Pixellated | Jul 10 2007, 09:48 PM Post #105 |
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*subtle wink, that isn't so subtle when translated into text* |
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| Spriggan | Jul 10 2007, 10:53 PM Post #106 |
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Sad, Sad Bastard
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There's a few grammatical hang-ups here and there, but nothing too distracting. The humor and storytelling mix well and don't hamper any plot developments. To put it in nautical terms: steady as she goes and smooth sailing, gentlemen. |
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| Pixellated | Jul 10 2007, 11:57 PM Post #107 |
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Being responsible
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Please point out any mistakes, I'm always looking for corrections. Most of this is written on my old laptop at college on WordPad and transferred afterwards. |
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| RedFox742 | Aug 1 2007, 03:41 PM Post #108 |
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Obama's got a gun...
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It's a pity this is getting so little attention these days... but it is a fair amount of work to read, what, a hundred pages now? |
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| Bavarian | Aug 2 2007, 06:08 PM Post #109 |
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Vorsprung durch Nachdenken
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I've been reading the whole story almost three times by now, and still enjoying it. As you ask for corrections ... right now I only remember these four: *looks through the text where they are* Page 57, near the end of the page: "Rikakp guards" Page 69, last third of page: sentence starting with "HE", the E should be a lower case letter Page 70, penultimate paragraph: "minacious" (should be "menacious", according to my dictionary) Page 86, upper third of page: "Lothar didn't couldn't be bothered..." Anyways, great story, keep it up! ... Though I felt sorry for the knife-bearer ... |
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| Pixellated | Aug 9 2007, 02:02 PM Post #110 |
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Thanks very much for pointing those out, they're fixed now, except for minacious: it's just another word for menacing =) |
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| Pixellated | Dec 19 2007, 10:46 PM Post #111 |
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Posted Image It's coming. |
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| Lothar Hex | Dec 20 2007, 12:06 AM Post #112 |
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Illogical
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This better not be indicative of the you attempting to self-publish the story as a book. We had harsh words with Red about that already. |
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| Pixellated | Dec 20 2007, 12:54 PM Post #113 |
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No, it just looks nicer with a cover. |
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| RedFox742 | Dec 20 2007, 01:41 PM Post #114 |
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Obama's got a gun...
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Harsh words? Nah, I didn't think so. You were totally a ball of fluff and kittens when I made that suggestion. :P Seriously, in retrospect, I'm glad of it. It let me move on to my new, original project, and let Pixellated take this story in his own direction. Amazingly, this story is about to be finished. And, yes, I'll be capping it with a small additional contribution of my own. |
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| Pixellated | Dec 21 2007, 07:32 PM Post #115 |
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Being responsible
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1) It's almost time for a UK government general election, or 2) Dire Peril's just been completed. Guess which one it is this time. =D ----- Dire Peril (PDF format, Around 1mb. Right-click and Save As unless you want to break your browser) (Many thanks to Virus for hosting the file at Perfectly Chaotic rather than you having to tolerate my Freewebs space) ----- The writing has been split about 60/40 between RedFox and I respectively, with me picking up around halfway through part VIII, and RedFox finishing up with the Epilogue. It's been awesome to be able to finish off the story; and probably the largest piece of writing I've ever done, although my chosen Uni course might soon top that in dissertations :P A massive thanks to RedFox for constant guidance, tolerance through my mistakes, and for un-doing all the incorrect English teachings I'd gained over the years. :D ----- Disclaimer: The fan fiction was written with the express and exclusive consent of all four authors of Exterminatus Now. Syrus The "Virus" Zuviel, Harold "Harry" Eastwood, Lothar Hex, Ryoushi "Rogue" Nekittou, and all other Exterminatus Now or Grim Darkness characters are © Stuart Edney, Martin Faulkner, Alan Graham, and Garry Webber. "Chao" and the planet Mobius are © SEGA. Any other characters are invented by the author(s) solely for the purpose of this story. ----- |
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| Webmistress L | Dec 22 2007, 01:21 AM Post #116 |
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The definition of maturity
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*claps* Bravo Red and Pix, for not only writing a great story... ...but for finishing it before I had grandkids. :D Seriously though, it was a great job on both of you. The scenes were so well written I could actually see it being played out like a movie in my head. You got Rogue brainwashed and back again in a manner that made sense (in a bad fantasy novel anyway :P) and the epilogue made me laugh loud enough to make my Mom check on me to make sure I wasn't having a fit. So not only for writing a good plot, thanks for making me laugh. This is a true companion to the actual comic. (On a totally random note, I'm now left wondering what the Z and M stand for in the cover for some inane reason :blink: Could not tell you why I want to know that, I just do.) |
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| Pixellated | Dec 22 2007, 02:44 AM Post #117 |
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Mine's Mark, not a clue what Red's is though. Great to have some feedback so quickly! Heh. Interrogation FTW.
So now you know. ...I wish mine was interesting. |
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| Grey Wolf | Dec 22 2007, 10:22 AM Post #118 |
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Wolf
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Just read the end of it. Brilliant writing throughout. Loved reading this from start to end. |
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| Anoko | Dec 22 2007, 09:42 PM Post #119 |
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Pathlariant
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Heh, quite an epic story. I enjoyed reading it immensely. :) You guys are both really good writers! |
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| Bavarian | Dec 23 2007, 08:32 PM Post #120 |
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Vorsprung durch Nachdenken
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I must say it was definitely worth the wait. ... And all the new words I've learned ("minacious" for instance:-) |
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| Webmistress L | Dec 24 2007, 01:20 PM Post #121 |
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The definition of maturity
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Huh, see I was thinking Mark for you when I saw the M but Redfox threw me off entirely. Thanks for answering. |
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| Jeffk38uk | Dec 24 2007, 03:09 PM Post #122 |
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Everything's great at your Junes.
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Oddly I was thinking more hipper uses, rap style. Dis iz Red Fox, D to da Z err oll!!! |
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| Melchior | Jan 5 2008, 12:43 AM Post #123 |
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student/waster/bum
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Just re-read again. Awesome stuff from both of you - got any more writing projects you're thinking of? |
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| Jeffk38uk | Jan 5 2008, 03:23 PM Post #124 |
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Everything's great at your Junes.
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The next one will be a romantic novel set in the same universe. It will star *CRACK *dies from blunt force trauma |
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| Pixellated | Jan 5 2008, 04:32 PM Post #125 |
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Being responsible
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*Drops bloodstained brick next to Jeff* ...Natalie Portman, and Hugh Laurie. |
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