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| A Dream Becomes Reality; My 2nd attempt at fanfic writing | |
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| Tweet Topic Started: Sep 13 2006, 11:41 PM (385 Views) | |
| aerisbolt | Sep 13 2006, 11:41 PM Post #1 |
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Beautiful Paradox
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Hi there everyone. I have posted my next fanfic, it is a work in progress but I thought I would post it in case anyone wants to check it out. Please be warned it is very fluffy and could contain some OCC. I do hope you'll like it. is the couple.EDIT: I have decided to keep this story at 5 chapters and use the rest of what I wrote as a one shot which will be finished and edited later on. So all that is left is a final edit and read through and I will be done with this story. http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3152460/1/ |
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| goddess_in_pink07 | Sep 15 2006, 12:01 AM Post #2 |
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Ambrosia
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ZOMG, loves I'm so excited! Teehee! You did a fab job on everything so far. You really gave me a vibrant pic of how Aeris looked. Very lovely indeed. Its going to be like the perfect cleris ending! Goody goody gosh!
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| Sadhana | Sep 15 2006, 10:35 PM Post #3 |
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capitalism is dead
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WOW, I'm sorry. I read this, and I was going to write a review and reply in a post. I got really busy and forgot. Erghh... my bad. :lol: It's loverly. It's great to see how your writing's grown since your last fic. I adored the way you captured Aerith's subdued gittiness in the first chapter. I left a review. My name there is Only Teenage Wasteland, so you know which review is mine. *Grammar Monster Takes Over* The paragraphs should be broken up a little bit. When writing dialog, each new speaker's dialog should be a new paragraph. For example:
It actually should be like this:
It's much easier to read that way, and makes keeping track of who is speaking much simpler. Please continue! I can't wait to see these two wed. |
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| aerisbolt | Sep 15 2006, 11:14 PM Post #4 |
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Beautiful Paradox
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Thank you goddess and Sadhana for reviewing! Sadhana, thank you so much for again helping me with becoming a better writer. I tried to heed your advice and made some changes, it would be great to know what you think now, I still need to go over chapter two again. Is my tense work better in this one, I am trying really hard to stay consistant after the great advice you gave me for Cloudless. So again thank you you really are a huge help Goddess, you are just too cute I am glad you are enjoying it and I will try to update as soon as I can. Thanks again to everyone who is taking time to read it, and again reviews are very welcome. |
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| goddess_in_pink07 | Sep 17 2006, 04:19 AM Post #5 |
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Ambrosia
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OK, I just finished reading the last 4 chapters... and, your so fantastic Aerisbolt. Every word fit perfect, and you did such a good job. Gosh, I can't imagine you getting any better.:huggle: Super-excellent-awesome- job Aerisbolt!
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| aerisbolt | Sep 18 2006, 12:24 PM Post #6 |
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Beautiful Paradox
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Wow, thanks goddess, I send along that fifty dollars for those kind words later But it all seriousness I am glad you enjoyed it. I still have a long ways to go before being a good writer but as long as I improve with each story that is what is important to me. Well that and people enjoying the stories I write. And as for the this story I need to fix a few things form the chapters but I may be leaving it at 5 chapters. I'll post again or edit my original post when it is officially done. Thanks again goddess for the very kind words and to everyone else who read or is reading it. Again reviews are appreciated. |
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| Enima | Sep 20 2006, 06:41 AM Post #7 |
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Aerith's little sister
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Hey there, just finished reading your fic and quite enjoyed it :) . Good job and by the way I also reviewed it before I forgot to. Keep it up hun
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| aerisbolt | Sep 21 2006, 05:50 PM Post #8 |
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Beautiful Paradox
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Thank you so much Enima, I have looked over your stories as well and I think you are very talented. I am glad you enjoyed mine and thank you for the encouragement, I appreciate it.
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