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| Dialogue Transcript; Of my current doujinshi project. :) | |
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| Luna-Nayru | Dec 26 2005, 05:16 PM Post #1 |
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Boys just wanna get in your tutu.
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It's been my aspiration ever since I first started playing Final Fantasy VII to make a complete manga out of the game, simply because I love to write and draw and FF7 is undisputedly my favorite game in its series. I wanted to portray the characters as I saw them in the game, no strings attached, and no fandoms to muddle up who Nomura made them out to be back in '97. I wanted to bring that back to the fan community, and I finally found the incentive and the time to sit down and write the beginning stages of the dialogue transcript. All artwork will be done by me in the future, although at present all I have is the written ideas and a few pages of character sketches on notebook paper. In any case, I hope you enjoy it. Of course, I'd really appreciate it if you'd comment/criticize. Prepare for a LONG read, here we go!![]() The opening of Final Fantasy VII features a dark alleyway, where an ethereally cheerful-looking flower girl cautiously takes a step, clasping her hands protectively at her chest. A pink ribbon dangles intriguingly between her palms as she dares to open her locked grasp, revealing a fluorescent object that radiates a flash of light. The small trinket’s vitality is revealed as the flower girl gasps, shielding it from view between woven fingers once again. She twists the ribbon into an oversized bow that fastens a long braid into place at the back of her head, kneeling beside a basket of fresh yellow daffodils. She clutches the basket in both hands, pausing momentarily with a mysterious hang of her head, thick strands of auburn hair falling into her eyes. She sighs, climbing to her feet as she strides elegantly down the darkened streets. As she walks, a train slides to a screeching halt on the barred-off rail beside her. On the opposite side of the track, two guards clad in vivid blue patrol the area. She doesn’t seem to notice the young man in uniform, the EX-SOLDIER, perched atop the train engine, his spiky blonde hair waving in the rush of wind, and disappears from view as the guards suddenly fall to the ground behind her. BIGGS and JESSIE leap from the train, grinning in triumph as they dash off down the street, followed by WEDGE and the burly-looking AVALANCHE LEADER, an enormous gun attached in place of his hand, who barks at them authoritatively. AVALANCHE LEADER: ‘Ey! This ain’t no field trip! Get in position ‘fore I drag you there! He turns to the train, sneering at the EX-SOLDIER on its roof with a second dosage of orders. AVALANCHE LEADER: And the hell’s your problem, newcomer?! Follow me! The AVALANCHE LEADER huffs off in annoyance. Moments later, the EX-SOLDIER formerly riding atop the engine leaps to the street with great ease. He raises his head coolly, revealing a stunning pair of fluorescent blue eyes, and shakes the strands of blonde from his face. He turns in the AVALANCHE LEADER’S direction with a carelessly crooked frown. EX-SOLDIER: Hmm. The EX-SOLDIER looks to the cobblestones with a shake of his head, and without another word, begins to stride slowly and confidently after the team. However, a SHINRA MP approaches him from behind, a gun at the ready, and cautiously approaches the seemingly unaware member of AVALANCHE. However, the EX-SOLDIER looks up, eyes shifting to one side as he slams a fist backward into the MP’s face, knocking him into unconsciousness. As the young man continues to walk without a second glance over his shoulder, BIGGS leaps into his path, blocking him with a barrage of awed praise. BIGGS: WOW!! You used to be in SOLDIER, all right! Do it again! Do it again! BIGGS turns to WEDGE, who enters looking slightly confused. BIGGS: Wedge, gimme my camera! Oh boy, it’s not every day we get one of these guys in a group like AVALANCHE!! JESSIE enters, firmly grabbing the back of his collar. JESSIE: Hold it, Biggs. She places a hand on her hip. JESSIE: Didn’t you ever wonder why guys like him don’t stick around with people like us? She turns her back to the EX-SOLDIER, blatantly shunning him as she folds her arms. JESSIE: He may have the brute strength we’re looking for, but guys from SOLDIER, they’ve got hearts of solid Mako. He’s our enemy, like it or not. BIGGS frowns, scratching the back of his neck sheepishly with a sigh. BIGGS: But Jessie, he’s an Ex-SOLDIER… There’s a difference. He turns to the EX-SOLDIER with a large grin across his face. BIGGS: Right, Mister…uh… BIGGS scratches his head in confusion. The EX-SOLDIER brushes past the trio with a low mutter of condescending. EX-SOLDIER: …Cloud Strife. CLOUD turns sharply to them. CLOUD: …Remember it. BIGGS, WEDGE, and JESSIE watch in awe as CLOUD exits. BIGGS grins hugely, throwing a fist into the air as JESSIE rolls her eyes and WEDGE carries a fazed expression. BIGGS: SOOOOO---COOL!! The trio approaches the gate to the reactor, with CLOUD taking up the lead, hands stuffed self-consciously into his pockets. BIGGS, WEDGE, and JESSIE follow suit, as BIGGS signs a pair of “bunny ears” over CLOUD’S head. JESSIE merely glares at him as they approach the AVALANCHE LEADER, who stands before the gate while impatiently tapping his foot. He looks to the team, his eyes widening hysterically. AVALANCHE LEADER: The hell do you think you’re doin’?! How many times I gotta tell ya NEVER TO MOVE IN A GROUP?! Goddamn!! JESSIE salutes him playfully with a hard wink. JESSIE: Yes sir, we’ll be more careful next time! She places a hand on her hip. JESSIE: So, what’s our plan, Serge? The AVALANCHE LEADER points a finger directly to her nose. AVALANCHE LEADER: You call me BARRET, missy! BARRET turns to the gate, gesturing toward the looming Mako Reactor with a thumb. BARRET: Our target’s the North Mako Reactor. We’ll meet on the bridge in front of it, get?! BIGGS, WEDGE, and JESSIE salute him with cheesy beams of adoration as Cloud eyes them awkwardly. BIGGS, WEDGE, JESSIE: O-kay!! JESSIE opens the gate and follows BIGGS and WEDGE through to the reactor, leaving BARRET and CLOUD alone in the street. CLOUD leans against the gateway as they exchange suspicious glares. BARRET: Don’t trust ya one bit…even if you are an Ex-SOLDIER… BARRET readies his gun and runs off after the team, leaving CLOUD, silent as ever, to brood. After a moment, he stares at the reactor, frowns in irritation, and decisively walks through the gate. As CLOUD arrives at the bridge to the Reactor, he meets up with BARRET, with BIGGS, WEDGE, and JESSIE further ahead. BARRET grins victoriously. BARRET: Look who decided to show up! Yo, Strife! This your first time in a Reactor? CLOUD turns to glare at him bitterly. CLOUD: No. Aren’t you forgetting? He faces the Reactor. CLOUD: I worked for ShinRa. BARRET raises his gun-arm, enraged, as he barks angrily. BARRET: Don’t talk about it like you’re so damn proud! These Goddamn machines are suckin’ out the lifeblood of this planet, and it’s the damn ShinRa’s fault! He faces the Reactor as CLOUD turns, frowning, to face him. BARRET: Mako’s all that’s keepin’ this planet from becomin’ a damn hole in the middle of space. But ShinRa’s suckin’ it out and usin’ it like it’s goin’ outta style. BARRET slams the gun into his remaining hand threateningly. BARRET: I’m takin’ ‘em out, you hear me?! I oughtta take ‘em out right with this here gun for damn near killin’ us all…! CLOUD rolls his eyes, striding past BARRET. CLOUD: Nice sentiment. BARRET seizes CLOUD in a headlock, dragging the Ex-SOLDIER along. BARRET: That’s it! You’re comin’ with me from now on!! CLOUD: Hey! JESSIE fidgets with a fuse box-like mechanism designed for securing the door to the reactor, while Biggs, lying on the pavement and focusing heavily on his work, attempts to rewire it. The mechanism surges as BARRET and CLOUD enter, the double doors sliding obediently open, while Jessie grins, thumping BIGGS on the back as he gets to his feet. She beams at Barret with a salute as Biggs stands fully upright, folding his arms triumphantly. JESSIE: Torpedo ready, Cap’n! (BARRET stalks through the doorway without a glance in her direction.) BARRET: Just get your asses on the elevator. (He turns to WEDGE with a scowl.) BARRET: And jus’ what do you think you’re doin’? Make yourself useful and guard the damn door!! (WEDGE jumps, startled.) WEDGE: Y-Yes sir! (WEDGE runs off, nervously scanning the area as BARRET rolls his eyes. Meanwhile, CLOUD leans against the elevator doorway, grinning inwardly.) CLOUD: …Heh. (BARRET whirls around.) BARRET: The hell’s so damn funny?! (CLOUD smirks.) CLOUD: Nothing really. But if you don’t hurry up, you’re going to miss your elevator, commando. (BARRET flushes a violent shade of crimson.) BARRET: LITTLE @(^)%#&)@*!! DON’T YOU GIVE ME ORDERS!! (CLOUD closes his eyes confidently, turning as he steps into the elevator.) CLOUD: Whatever. BARRET faces CLOUD as he enters, his back to the closed elevator doors as he fumes, pacing about the small space. CLOUD does not bother to look up. BARRET: %@$)!$’in high-maintenance ShinRa asses actin’ like they got us all by a leash… you’d think after all they done they’d have a little guilt in ‘em… He turns to CLOUD dangerously. BARRET: It’s a debt you owe us all, Strife! If you been sleepin’ a wink since you been in the ShinRa, I don’t want to hear about it! CLOUD glances up, raising his eyebrows. CLOUD: …Debt? BARRET: Don’t act like you got stupid all of a sudden. You played a damn role in suckin’ the life outta this Planet. You oughtta pay for what you done. CLOUD: The Reactors? They’re not my problem. BARRET approaches him aggressively, grabbing the front of his collar. BARRET: NOT YOUR PROBLEM?! You were a part of the damn frontlines of the gold-diggers that’re killin’ this planet and you say it’s NOT YOUR PROBLEM?! The Planet’s dyin’, Cloud! CLOUD pulls away. CLOUD: So long as I get through this job before then, it’s fine by me. The elevator reaches its destination as BARRET begins to step out. BARRET: Swear I should throw you to the roboguards… BARRET, CLOUD, JESSIE, BIGGS, and WEDGE cross a set of inwardly turning steel bridges, step through the doorway of the reactor, entering an enormous, column-like room with winding steel staircases twisting and turning in every direction. BIGGS whistles in amazement as JESSIE folds her arms. JESSIE: Well, it’s big enough, that’s for sure. BARRET: That’s the damn ShinRa for you. Gotta put on a damn show to kill a Planet. Makes ‘em come out lookin’ like rocket scientists ‘stead of murderers. I’m ready to blow ‘em into the next continent without a damn regret in me! WEDGE: Uh… Mr. Wallace, sir? …Um… what’s that? BARRET turns sharply to face his timid accomplice. BARRET: The hell ya mean, “What’s that?!” A regret’s when you screw up and don’t listen to your damn chief before he beats the $%)# outta— WEDGE: N-not that… JESSIE lets out a shriek, pointing at a robotic pod that opens to reveal a mechanical monster, electricity worming in and out of its various parts. JESSIE: THAT! BARRET cocks his gun-arm into a readied position, eyes wide as Cloud stares at the artificial creature from behind his employer. BARRET: MOTHER OF—damn!! Looks like they tightened security! Strife, back me up! We’re takin’ her down! The creature charges at the duo as they dive in opposite directions, causing it to barrel toward WEDGE as he stands, petrified, in its path. Suddenly, a bolt of lightning strikes the creature as it terminates, speaking in a robotic voice that fades as it collapses. ROBOT: SECURITY OFFENSE TERMina… BARRET turns to CLOUD, who slings his great Buster Sword over his shoulder once more. BARRET: The hell was that?! CLOUD fidgets with a small green orb attached to his sword. CLOUD: Materia. BARRET: Materi-what?! CLOUD: It’s simple enough, even for you. Materia are various types of gems that allow weapons to have magical qualities. BIGGS blurts from the trio of himself, WEDGE, and JESSIE, waving his arm in the air. BIGGS: Ooh, like one of those great light-up key chains! BARRET ignores him, his face flushed and a look of mild embarrassment appearing in the midst of his bewildered rage. BARRET: Flyin’ thunderbolts are “magical qualities”?! You’re outta your mind! CLOUD turns on his heel, his back facing the AVALANCHE members as he stuffs the orb into his pocket. CLOUD: I suggest you learn to use it, if you plan on surviving against the ShinRa. The team continues onward, walking steadily with a surly CLOUD in the lead and BARRET muttering at the rear. BARRET: I shouldn’a listened to ‘er, how in the bloody hell did she talk me into this, what the hell was she even thinkin’, stupid chick, don’t even know ‘im and she tells me that Strife’s— CLOUD turns fiercely. CLOUD: You got something to say to me? BARRET seizes his collar, dragging him onward. BARRET: Keep walkin’, spiky head! Ain’t none of your damn business who I’ve been talkin’ to! He points forward with his gun-arm, squinting as he directs CLOUD to their destination. BARRET: See that big ol’ hunka metal over there? That there’s the main core o’ the reactor. CLOUD mutters under his breath, twisting out of BARRET’S grip. CLOUD: Like I didn’t know that already. BARRET: Now, you listen up! You’re gonna set the bomb! Once you get the fuse lit an’ all, we’ve got a measly ten minutes to haul our asses outta here. So you better be ready! Got it? CLOUD: Isn’t the bombing your job? BARRET: Damn nice try. I gotta watch you to make sure you don’t pull nothin’. CLOUD turns on his heel, grumbling as he snatches the bomb wearily. CLOUD: Be my guest. CLOUD approaches the core of the reactor across a steel bridge, settling a hand on his hip self-consciously as he tosses and catches the bomb in his gloved hand. He begins to inwardly converse as he steps toward the center. CLOUD: Nostalgic, I guess. That’d be the word. But I still can’t shake the feeling that there’s something fishy about all this, even for the ShinRa. I guess I’m still a little paranoid about all of it… He steps up the steel plates to the fuses, tinkering feverishly as a bead of sweat trickles down his cheek. CLOUD: This is so pathetic. I can’t believe I’ve got chills. It’s not like this is any different from when— CLOUD suddenly shouts and cringes, clutching his forehead as his vision goes white. A voice speaks to him from within his mind, a desperate voice reaching him with blinding intensity. ???: Watch out! This isn’t just a reactor!! BARRET seizes CLOUD’S shoulders as his eyelids fling apart, the intensity suddenly ceasing as the AVALANCHE leader shakes him vigorously. BARRET: The hell’s'a matter with you?! Strife?! CLOUD shakes his head suddenly, passing off the prior events with a sharp shrug. CLOUD: Nothing. BARRET: Nothing? NOTHING?! What’re you trying to pull?! CLOUD: …The Mako in the air is… concentrated here. I’m just… He shakes his head again, focusing vigorously on the fuses. CLOUD: It’s not important. Shouldn’t we be shutting down these security systems? BARRET: You kiddin’ me? With the bomb lodged in there, it’ll be too jammed up to do a damn thing before the whole place goes to high hell. Just do’s I say and you won’t get your spiky head in a rut. CLOUD: Whatever. He takes a short breath and lodges the bomb into the reactor as it blinks urgently. BARRET: What’d I tell ya? He gestures to himself proudly. BARRET: Ain’t nothin’ that can go wrong when I’m in charge! You just keep your trap zipped and follow directions and y’got your damn perfect mission! I always say— CLOUD gestures for silence as he stares intently into the core of the reactor at the bomb’s insertion point. CLOUD: I need quiet. Something’s… not right here. BARRET: What the hell’re you on about? CLOUD’S eyes widen in revelation as he takes a step back. CLOUD: Get out of the way!! BARRET jumps back in alarm, his eyes widening as an enormous mechanical scorpion lowers by crane onto the steel bridges, blocking the exit for CLOUD and BARRET. CLOUD draws his Buster Sword, arming himself with Materia, and Barret loads his gun as they prepare for the battle. The scorpion rears immensely as it charges forth on wheels, surging with electricity as if in a wild rage. CLOUD and BARRET stare incredulously at the man-made creature as BARRET turns to him demandingly. BARRET: You got about ten o’ them key chains we can use to take this thing? CLOUD: This is way beyond what I remember from SOLDIER… The creature lunges forth in the direction of the central tower, toward the position where CLOUD and BARRET stand firmly with their weapons drawn. CLOUD: Don’t let it touch the core! BARRET: What the hell?! CLOUD: Don’t you get it?! If it touches the core, it’ll touch the bomb! BARRET: Well, what’s your bright idea, spiky head?! Guard the core until the damn grenade explodes?! CLOUD looks to the doorway. CLOUD: We have to stall it and run… there’s just no other way… Do something! Climb the tower and attack it from above, use anything! BARRET: BUT WE’VE ONLY GOT TEN %&##@* MINUTES TO GET THE HELL OUT OF HERE!! CLOUD turns to BIGGS, WEDGE, and JESSIE, who stand huddled in terror in a nearby corner. CLOUD: Hey, you three! You’ve got to help us distract it! BARRET: Are you off your goddamn nut?! They’ll never get out in time! CLOUD dodges the scorpion with an agile lunge, landing in a poised fighter’s position. CLOUD: Split up! CLOUD and BARRET dive in opposite directions as the Guard Scorpion’s claw plunges into the metal bridge where they stood instants prior, ripping through the steel and creating an open crater in its place. The monster crushes the remnants of metal with a grinding pinch of its claw and continues to pursue the AVALANCHE team. The five adventurers dash for the doorway with the creature at their heels. BARRET hurries them forward through the door, sprinting through after CLOUD reaches the other side. BARRET suddenly lets out a bellow of pain as a surge of electricity strikes the back of his thick vest, penetrating the material and engulfing his body. He stumbles forward in agony, grunting as he struggles to stand with the creature hovering over him, its pincers raised. It is suddenly thwarted, however, as CLOUD fires a blast of ice from the end of his Buster Sword, flaring dangerously as the creature stumbles backward. He tosses a small bottle of green liquid to BARRET while the scorpion is stunned. CLOUD: Drink it now! We don’t have time to baby-sit you! BARRET shakes the jar suspiciously. BARRET: What the hell is this?! CLOUD turns on his heel, weapon at the ready as he turns his head to speak. CLOUD: Trust me just this once! Drink it! BARRET stares at the remedy with a strange expression as CLOUD swipes at the creature in vain, in the midst of a valiant struggle. The younger suddenly releases a cry of pain as the scorpion pins him against a nearby wall with a crushing impact, clutching the ex-SOLDIER in its claw and constricting his midsection. BARRET looks up, his eyes widening. BARRET: STRIFE! He hastily looks to the bottle and takes a hearty gulp of CLOUD’s hi-potion, suddenly surging with a green-tinted energy. Wiping the blood from his cheek with the edge of his machine gun arm, he springs to his feet and fires a torrent of bullets at the fiend. Heated energy begins to gather at the barrels of his Gatling gun as he fires, building quickly as CLOUD becomes more desperate. CLOUD: Hurry up! BARRET screws up his face in intense concentration, rage building as the ball of fire grows to a dangerous level. BARRET: DON’T… GIVE… ME… ORDERS! The blast is released from BARRET’s gun as it plows against the iron guard of the creature, knocking it off its metallic legs as CLOUD drops, falling helplessly toward the brewing Mako below. His eyes widen with a sharp inhale of breath as BARRET seizes the back of his collar, hoisting him onto the bridge once more. He looks CLOUD directly in the eyes, speaking in a low, unusually calm voice. BARRET: I promised Tifa I’d watch you. So keep your sorry ass in gear. CLOUD does not meet BARRET’s eyes as the Guard Scorpion begins to recover, hauling itself back to its fighting stance. BARRET drags CLOUD by the collar as they continue their escape, running through the door once again. BARRET declares his signature motto as the scorpion fires several lasers toward them. BARRET: There ain’t no gettin’ offa this train we’re on! |
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| 012607 | Dec 26 2005, 10:15 PM Post #2 |
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Forum Drunk
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Woah, woah, woah. You're going to mangaise the whole game? Are you crazy?! I hope so! *grins* I really like what you've do so far, the characterisation is spot on- it's nice too to see scenes extended! I'd love to see it when you've drawn some out. Good luck on your project. =] |
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| Luna-Nayru | Dec 26 2005, 10:22 PM Post #3 |
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Boys just wanna get in your tutu.
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Damn straight I'm crazy! I've been dying to do this for ages now. I promised myself I'd plunge right into it after AC was released, so here I am. ![]() I'm glad you liked the way I rolled out the characters. I really wanted to a little more emphasism on their personalities (plus a little foreshadowing on the future events of the story) in the place of the gameplay. After all, that's what mangas based on games typically do. So I guess I'm going according to tradition. Anywho, glad you stopped by, and thanks so much for reviewing! Look forward to some Cleris-y scenes after the first mission is over.
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| Roseyrosho | Dec 27 2005, 11:59 AM Post #4 |
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HOMFG!!! UAYAYAYAYAYAY!!!!! *Glomps Luna* can't wait
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| Luna-Nayru | Jan 31 2006, 01:37 PM Post #5 |
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Boys just wanna get in your tutu.
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*huggles C_A* This project is not dead, folks! I'm posting the next part, which finishes off the fight with the Guard Scorpion. Leave it to me to be the queen of suspense--Aeris appears, like, three panels later. This installation is pretty short. But, anyway, CLOUD! And weirdness with Jenova! And CLOUD! And the distortion of scenes. And CLOUD! And Clessie fangirlism! And more CLOUD! --- The Guard Scorpion bursts through the wall, slicing through the iron with its pincers and ripping it apart as if it were paper. CLOUD darts to the left, rolling agilely away from the blast, and turns, crouching, to look over his shoulder. He springs to his feet as he sees BARRET hammering an array of bullets into the creature, making a futile effort to press it back and halt its progress toward them. The creature, unfazed, continues to make its way toward BARRET. CLOUD looks at him with bewildered irritation as BARRET runs in the opposite direction from him down the iron bridge. CLOUD: What do you think you’re doing?! BARRET: Move your stupid ass, Spike! We’ll rendezvous at Sector 8 Station when we get outta here, now scram! The scorpion blasts an electric laser from its tail that spans the length of space between CLOUD and BARRET, causing the section of the bridge to collapse. CLOUD leaps out of the blast’s radius as the creature fires its ammunition in his direction, exploding in subsequence feet behind him as he slides skillfully down an iron ladder. Landing with agility on the bridge below, he crouches and springs to his feet, dashing off with the scorpion in hot pursuit. He looks up to the higher levels of the reactor shaft, spotting the door and releasing a gasp. CLOUD: The exit! CLOUD immediately bolts for the door in a fury, halting suddenly at the sound of a pleading cry from the end of the bridge. JESSIE: CLOUD! CLOUD whirls around, his eyes widening at the sight of JESSIE, the Guard Scorpion pinning her ankle into the ground as it prepares to strike her. CLOUD dashes to the rescue as she strains a hand forth, reaching for his. He pulls her out of the creature’s grip, hoisting her onto his left arm and bombarding the scorpion with a blast of fire from the end of his Buster Sword, gripped tightly in his right hand. JESSIE clings to CLOUD, her cheeks flushing a deep crimson with wide eyes as she watches the monster roll helplessly down the steps below. She stumbles to her feet as CLOUD seizes her wrist, pulling her along as the creature recuperates. CLOUD: Let’s get outta here! JESSIE stares at him, still flushed and panting heavily. JESSIE: Um… CLOUD interjects, staring fixedly at the exit and continuing to pull her hurriedly up the flights of steps. CLOUD: Don’t thank me, just move! CLOUD and JESSIE make their way to the top of the steps, reaching the door at the top. CLOUD furiously attempts to wrench the handle into recession, but his efforts are to no avail. CLOUD: It’s locked! JESSIE pushes him aside with determination apparent in her expression. JESSIE: Move over, SOLDIER-boy! It’s my turn to help you! She unlatches a nearby hatch in the wall, finding a pad of symbols demanding a pass code. Feverishly typing numbers in to the system, JESSIE begins to sweat in anxiety. Beside her, CLOUD steals a glance over his shoulder. The Guard Scorpion is making its way up the shaft toward the pair, digging its claws into the walls around it as it struggles to climb toward its victims. CLOUD: Hurry up! JESSIE squints heatedly, concentrating harder on her work. JESSIE: Almost… A message appears automatically, declaring that JESSIE has inputted a valid password and is granted access. She smirks cockily. JESSIE: That’ll teach ‘em to mess with the best of AVALANCHE! Come on, Cloud— CLOUD?! She shrieks in terror as the scorpion grabs CLOUD around the middle, dragging him downward into the pits of the reactor once more. He grunts in anguish, his fingers scraping desperately at the landing on which JESSIE stands. She grasps his hand, pulling him toward the door with all her might. CLOUD strains to open an eye, staring at her intensely as he struggles to speak. CLOUD: Get… off… me! It’ll only take… both of us! Suddenly, BIGGS and WEDGE appear in the doorway. WEDGE seizes JESSIE around the middle and carries her thrashing form over his shoulder and away from CLOUD. JESSIE: Put me down, you big dumb jerk! We can’t just let him die! WEDGE carries an expression of deep shame as BIGGS turns with a pained look at CLOUD, who is still struggling to pull himself away from the scorpion’s grip. BIGGS: We’ll get Jess out of here! Just don’t die, Mister Cloud! CLOUD forces a nod, prompting the two to run out of his frame of vision with a protesting JESSIE on WEDGE’S shoulder. He closes his eyes tightly, holding onto the ledge with the last of his strength, and suddenly sees a blank flash that temporarily obliterates the dire circumstances. He hears the mysterious voice in his head once again. ???: You’ve taken a fall… first-class SOLDIER. CLOUD’S eyes snap open, wide and bearing slit-like pupils resembling the eyes of a cat. He suddenly radiates inhuman energy and leaps from the grip of the scorpion, taking suddenly to the air. His eyes pulsate with strange energy like vortexes as he is raised higher and higher, flying by way of an unknown force with blinding speed and leaving the scorpion far below him. A white light interrupts the scene instants before he rockets to the top of the reactor shaft. The reactor is portrayed from an outside view as the bomb fully detonates the entire structure. The remainder of the AVALANCHE team stands outside, huddled close to one another as they watch in awe. BARRET’S eyes appear strained as his mouth hangs open like a broken hinge, his gun hanging loosely at his side. JESSIE clings to WEDGE, her hands shielding her eyes as BIGGS and WEDGE watch with incomprehensible shock plastered across their expressions. BARRET lowers his head after a moment, frowning as he cocks his gun-arm once more. BARRET: Well… ain’t nothin’ left here. We got the damn job done. WEDGE, still making an attempt to comfort a silently grieving JESSIE, turns to BARRET with confusion. WEDGE: But what about Cl— BARRET turns to him in a fury, his loaded arm raised threateningly. BARRET: Ain’t nothin’ left, y’hear me?! We’re getting’ closer to savin’ the goddamn Planet with every goddamn sacrifice we make! Rendezvous at Sector 8 Station and be @&^%$!#@ quick about it! BARRET runs off with a vigorous aura of maintaining strength, leaving BIGGS, WEDGE, and JESSIE to trudge after him. Moments later, CLOUD stumbles from the flames, staring after the four with blurred vision as he attempts to trail them. He reaches a hand desperately toward them, clutching the crumbling wall nearby for support. CLOUD: H… Hey! |
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| Roseyrosho | Feb 9 2006, 04:19 AM Post #6 |
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HOMFG!! Luna ...you're a total freakin writing genious GODDESS!!! :bows: I admire you for re making this whole entire thing you're my new muse :lol:hope to hear more soon
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| Luna-Nayru | Mar 19 2006, 04:51 AM Post #7 |
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Boys just wanna get in your tutu.
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*huggles C_A* You're so sweet! My only worry is that I'm going overboard with the retelling of the scenes. Wasn't really expecting to insert one of Cloud's Jenova freak outs into that part, but it kind of came to me as I was writing it that the escape from the reactor needed some more... flavor, artistically speaking. But, after the long wait, I've finally got Cloud's meeting with Aerith ready to post! Please pardon the Cleris undertones--I wanted it to be pretty subtle, but still very representational of the way they interacted in the game. One of my goals with this comic is that both Clerises and CloTis can enjoy it, so I'm trying hard to put the LTD in a form that appeals to my neutral side. Sorry it's so short, but I'm working on a much longer entry for my next post. I've just been so short on time lately. Anyway, hope you enjoy! CLOUD stumbles through the wreckage of the reactor, pushing his way through the panicking crowds of fleeing civilians in a vain search for the rest of the AVALANCHE team. He freezes in the midst of the ruins with the scuttling crowds pushing their way past him, the crowds seeming to fly by in a blur as his surroundings become a unified haze. The nature of the world around him becomes illegible as CLOUD’S eyes attempt to focus with a great amount of strain. Smearing shades of gray surround him, and in a fleeting instant, a man brushes past, knocking a small, frail flower girl to the ground. CLOUD’S eyes lock upon the image, the muddled world around him and the girl seeming to blur ever more as her reflection stands out like a beacon of light. It is the same girl who appeared in the beginning of the story, her basket of yellow flowers strewn across the soiled pavement as she gingerly begins to gather them once more. In his typical nature, CLOUD watches her for a moment, then coldly turns on his heel and begins to stride off, rubbing his forehead as if he has received an injury. However, moments later, the voice of a girl reaches his ears. GIRL: Excuse me, sir? He freezes for a moment, then shakes his head and continues to walk. However, the pale, fragile hand of a woman, several bangles adorning the wrist, extends a finger and lightly taps his shoulder. GIRL: Excuse me. CLOUD turns irritably to face the girl, opening his mouth to reprimand her. CLOUD: What do you-? His voice trails off as he stares blankly into the face of none other than the FLOWER GIRL, her vibrant green eyes locking upon his own for the first time as she smiles lightly, sensing his sudden astonishment. FLOWER GIRL: Sorry. Didn’t mean to startle you, but could you tell me… what just happened here? CLOUD pauses, his hand raised slightly as he stares at her, still somewhat dumbstruck. He lowers his hand, scratching the back of his neck sheepishly, and mutters a concise reply. CLOUD: …It’s nothing. The FLOWER GIRL tilts her head with a bright smile, shrugging a shoulder as she turns on her heel with playful words of parting. FLOWER GIRL: Well, if you say so. She freezes in astonishment as CLOUD’s hand suddenly springs forth, alerting her attention as he grasps her arm. CLOUD: Wait! She turns with an expectant smile. FLOWER GIRL: Mm…? CLOUD hastily pulls his hand away. CLOUD: Listen… In an anxious loss for words, he searches for some sort of muse. His eyes suddenly focus upon the basket of yellow flowers dangling from the crook of her elbow, making a feeble attempt at a conversation. CLOUD: …Don’t see many flowers around here. Immediately attentive, she fingers her way through the basket. FLOWER GIRL: Oh, these? Do you like them? She extends a single daffodil toward him, clutched between two delicate fingers, and smiles charismatically. FLOWER GIRL: They’re only a gil! CLOUD focuses on her smile, seemingly unable to comprehend the nature of her expression before nodding acquiescently, rummaging in his pocket for her payment. CLOUD: Just a— He suddenly freezes as she tucks a flower behind his ear, giggling lightly as she walks off with an unmistakable bounce in her step. In a state of mild shock, he gently takes the flower from behind his ear between two fingers, gripping it lightly by its stem as he watches her disappear into the masses of people. |
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| Lynx | Mar 19 2006, 01:58 PM Post #8 |
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MY! Luna-Nayru, you're GENIUS!!! :o The scene with the flower is totally perfect! I must see Cloud with that daffodil behind his ear :lol:
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| Roseyrosho | Mar 20 2006, 12:24 AM Post #9 |
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*dies* Meh Luna!!! ![]() I was starting to worry about this one *sniff* you're my hero ![]() it's so sweet!! aww Cloud's actions are so awesome <3awww :lol: so you're playing squeenix on us eh? XD no matter you're still gonna blow me away with your talent this is coming along great so far I can't wait for more
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| Existence: DENIED | Mar 20 2006, 09:33 PM Post #10 |
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Ayyyyyyyy~ Luna!!!!! You have a GREAT writing style! I soooo WISH I had the writing style you have! And many other people too! I can't wait till you write Her Death and how Cloud felt about it...^.^ |
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| Lynn | Mar 21 2006, 12:59 PM Post #11 |
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Lynn has no Lloud smut ;-;
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I'm going to wait until I have more time to savour Cloud and Aerith's first meeting, but I've read the previous parts before, just never commented! *will punish self later for the atrocity, do not fear* I'm loving the description of the scenes that take place. Just loving it. The detail has me in awe, which struck a real high when you decribed the interior of the reactor. What can I say? Description plays a major part of my fic-enjoyment, and I'm so glad your transcript has plenty of it (but nothing over-the-top either). In fact, I cannot even look at this as a transcript, as the word is reminiscent of script fics, which universally suck due to their massive lack of detail. Nope, it's a full-blown fic to me. I also love the personalities given to Jessie, Biggs and Wedge, and cannot wait for the part where Jessie fusses over Cloud a little. If I didn't adore your drawings so, I'd suggest giving up the doujin idea and focus on bringing in the chapters faster! :lol: But since I do, I can't wait to see this re-emerge as a doujinshi someday! ...What? Helpful criticism? Maybe once I pluck the fangirlism from my eyes.
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| Schala | Mar 22 2006, 01:29 AM Post #12 |
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This is amazing! The transcript's looking good, so I can't wait to see the drawings! I hope I live to see the day that this gets completed!
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| Luna-Nayru | Jul 2 2006, 04:41 AM Post #13 |
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Boys just wanna get in your tutu.
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IT LIVES! *shocks thread back to life* Thanks so much to all of you for your lovely comments! I'd pick through all of them and tell each of you how much I love you for being so sweet, but it'd take me days and I think we'd all be better off if I cut to the chase--the next installment of this transcript, which everybody probably thought was dead. :lol: Sorry about delaying it FOREVER again, I just put it off for a really long time because I got stuck in the process of writing it. I did a lot of editing with this--it was actually really long originally, but as I was writing it, I realized that I was dwelling too much on the silly little things and straying away from the plot. I actually had a scene on the train to Sector 7 (mainly intended to be comical), in which the AVALANCHE gang uses their "fake IDs" on the train, which was a really minor detail in the game, but I made it into a scene in itself. That scene was axed in the final version, so most of the delay was due to me debating over whether or not to keep it in or move on. :lol: But here it is, and I hope you can forgive me for it being so ridiculously late. CLOUD shakes his head as if to brush his thoughts aside, clearly engaged in deep contemplation as he places the FLOWER GIRL’s gift loosely into his pocket. He strides slowly into a deserted alleyway, turning nonchalantly into the damp streets of an empty crosswalk at a bridge. The grimy road lacks a significant amount of life and appears to have been abandoned mere moments prior to CLOUD’s entrance, several clusters of litter lining the gutters and fermenting in pools of oil and drainage. A newspaper bearing the headline “HEIDEGGER PREDICTS BOOM AND BUST FOR SHINRA, INC.” flutters by in the feebly lingering gusts of breeze left by the panic. CLOUD treads upon the newspaper with a heavy brown boot as it lands forgotten in a soiled puddle on the pavement, pausing for a moment as he looks into the city streets in the distance to hear the distant sounds of the commotion. However, he catches a glimpse of a troop of Shinra MPs approaching him, weapons at the ready. He winces in annoyance, his right hand making its way to the hilt of the great blade at his shoulder. CLOUD: Shinra soldiers… A soldier points to CLOUD accusingly. SHINRA MP: Hey, you! CLOUD does not hesitate before knocking the entire troop into withdrawal with a blast of fire from his Buster Sword, making a bold dash for the streets. However, several more officers surround him as he reaches the bridge’s rail, backing away as he clings to the iron bar with one perspiring hand, extruding his sword forth threateningly with the other. A leading officer steps forward, trembling slightly as he eyes CLOUD’s weapon with wariness. SHINRA MP 2: U-Under penalty of the law, don’t make another move! CLOUD shoots the soldier a deadly frown from the corner of his eye, his grip upon the blade never wavering. He then glances to the railroad overlooked by the bridge on which he stands, hearing the nearby whistle of an approaching train engine. His gaze returns to the troops surrounding him. CLOUD: …I’ll take my chances. Gripping the railing, CLOUD balances his weight onto his palm and back flips off the edge of the street toward the filthy tracks below. The guards fire an array of bullets directly at the spot where CLOUD stood instants prior, ricocheting off the railing of the bridge. Just as the situation appears grave for CLOUD, who plummets toward the tracks below, he makes a skillful landing in a fighter’s stance on the roof of a train that screeches by beneath him, bullets blasting in a chain in his wake. Never pausing to glance over his shoulder once more, CLOUD allows the tracks to carry him away from the frenzied men above him, passing through several defaced archways framing the train’s path without a trace of apprehension. The scene focuses on the interior of the train in an overloaded storage compartment, where BARRET, BIGGS, WEDGE, and JESSIE sit in an uninterrupted silence among the crates and luggage. BARRET has created a makeshift seat from a crate marked “FRAGILE” on the compartment’s left side, fervently rummaging through the same newspaper found on the streets of Midgar with a heated mixture of frustration and infuriated assimilation with the paper’s subject apparent in his expression. BIGGS lies sprawled across a pile of suitcases, repeatedly tossing an unlit hand-grenade into the air and retrieving it with an unfocused look in his eyes, while WEDGE sits on a crate beside the door, staring contemplatively at his boots with his chin cradled in his palms. JESSIE stands in solitude in the compartment’s corner, staring emptily at the upturned palms hanging loosely at her sides. None of the stowaways meet one another’s gaze until WEDGE sits upright, looking to BIGGS with a mildly hurt expression darkening his features. WEDGE: He was supposed to meet us at the train station… BIGGS catches the hand-grenade once more, holding it pensively in his thickly gloved hand as he closes his eyes momentarily. BIGGS: I wish we could’ve known him a little better. I don’t think he ever even knew our names… BARRET suddenly clenches the newspaper in a fist, growling as he instantly gets to his feet, waving his gun-arm menacingly. BARRET: Don’t you two go and get all &%)#*$@$ sentimental!! There ain’t no way that little $&)@#* got himself killed in there!! Strife was a SOLDIER, for God’s-- JESSIE releases a cry and buries her face in her hands at the sound of the name, causing the trio to cease their conversation and turn swiftly in her direction. After a moment’s silence, she wipes her eyes slowly on the cuff of her sleeve, raising her head to reveal an agitated, tear-stained face. She eyes the three men dangerously before speaking. JESSIE: He’s an Ex-SOLDIER. She lowers her head, closing her eyes tightly. JESSIE: …There’s a difference. The trio stares at her, dumbfounded, as she turns swiftly away to face the corner. However, the moment’s silence is shattered by the sound of a furious rapping from the roof of the compartment. JESSIE glances upward, frowning, while BIGGS looks to BARRET with stern curiosity igniting his expression. BIGGS: Hey… do you think he… Cloud… Do you think he’s going to fight ‘til the end for AVALANCHE? BARRET turns to him, reddening feverishly as bullets of sweat line his brow. BARRET: The hell would I know?! Do I look like a mind reader?! Raising his fist, he pummels the crate which previously served as his surrogate seat with a blow of aggravation. BARRET: If y’all weren’t such screw-ups, you might have more goddamn recruits than that little— The side door of the compartment bursts open, causing WEDGE to release a scream of terror as BIGGS scoots backward fearfully into the pile of luggage. BIGGS: WHOA! A figure swings skillfully into the frame of the door, planting his feet firmly on the tiled floor as he brushes his spiky blonde hair from his eyes. CLOUD makes an unfazed entrance, swinging his sword in a spiral before slinging it triumphantly to its place upon his shoulder. JESSIE’s hands fly to her open mouth as she releases a gasp of alarm. JESSIE: Cloud…!! CLOUD looks about the compartment, noticing BARRET’s expression of utter fury as he scratches the back of his neck. CLOUD: Looks like I’m a little late. BARRET confronts CLOUD, pointing his gun-arm mere inches from his nose as unleashes his wrath. BARRET: You’re goddamn right, you’re late!! Come waltzin’ in here makin’ a big scene when you had us all worked up about your stupid ass!! I’m takin’ this outta your money, hot stuff!! CLOUD shrugs indifferently, situating himself as he leans against the wall with folded arms. CLOUD: Big deal. JESSIE steps forward, looking CLOUD over with a scrupulous expression as she clutches his wrists fretfully. JESSIE: “Big deal?!” What on earth are you talking about, look at you, you’ve got cuts all over! Are those BURNS?! Did you get caught in the explosion, oh, you got caught in the explosion, look, look his face is covered in ashes! She scrubs his cheek fussily with a handkerchief as he furrows his brow in irritation. CLOUD: Hey! JESSIE freezes, looking about the compartment and noticing the dumbfounded expressions of her companions. The unlit grenade rolls feebly from BIGGS’s grip as his hand hangs limply at his knee. JESSIE composes herself, stuffing the handkerchief into her pocket as she turns swiftly on her heel. JESSIE: Ahem, shouldn’t we have moved on by now? Next compartment, right? Right. Good. She swiftly scuttles through the compartment door, slamming it immediately in her wake. Following a moment of utter silence, BIGGS scratches his head, still somewhat dumbstruck. BIGGS: Man, I’ll never understand girls… BARRET turns with a flustered appearance to face him. BARRET: This ain’t no time for your damn daydreamin’! We’re movin’ out! Follow me! He jogs fervently through the compartment door, leaving CLOUD alone with BIGGS and WEDGE. WEDGE gets to his feet obediently, promptly making his way toward the door. Before passing through the threshold, he turns to CLOUD with a sheepish smile. WEDGE: Cloud… you were great back there. CLOUD merely glances at him, his arms remaining in a stubborn fold with an undauntedly apathetic frown. Lowering his head in shame, WEDGE twiddles his thumbs contemplatively as he trudges out of the compartment. Noticing CLOUD’s state of brooding, BIGGS hesitates before offering a jovial grin and words of encouragement. BIGGS: Hey, loosen up. We’ll do even better next time. No screw-ups. All right? He extends an expectant hand to CLOUD, beaming amiably as he awaits a response. However, maintaining his pungent image, CLOUD brushes past bitterly, slouching as he shuffles out of the compartment. CLOUD: Don’t worry about it. BIGGS watches, his reddening face stricken with a mystified expression, as CLOUD shoves the door aside and trudges into the next compartment. BIGGS releases a weighted sigh as he follows with a frown. The train circles around an enormous iron pillar looming high above the densely populated streets of Midgar’s slums. There is a noticeably contrasting settlement atop the pillar on a massive steel plate, having higher maintenance and a visibly thriving economy of industrialization. However, the train screeches to a halt in the slums below, where several civilians linger among the dreary atmosphere. As WEDGE and JESSIE step out of one of the train’s passenger compartments, laughing as BIGGS sits triumphantly on top of the car with a readied slingshot pointed at the unloading passengers, BARRET attempts to regulate their behavior, shaking his makeshift arm at the three of them and shouting several indistinct curses. Meanwhile, CLOUD stands at a short distance, staring up at the immense plate above with a pensive frown. After a few moments, BARRET storms in his direction, muttering incessantly about his colleagues while BIGGS leaps to the ground below. BARRET: Damn kids, don’t take nothin’ &)#*@+&’in seriously… As BARRET nears him, CLOUD speaks, never taking his eyes off the pillar. CLOUD: A floating city… pretty unsettling scenery. BARRET freezes in his tracks with a startled expression. BARRET: Huh?! CLOUD closes his eyes with a furrowed brow. CLOUD: The pillar. BARRET’s expression quickly changes from shock to offense as he retorts. BARRET: I know that, spiky-ass, I jes’ didn’t expect to hear it outta someone like you! CLOUD merely shoots him a swift glance as BARRET grins. BARRET: You jes’ full of surprises, Strife. CLOUD merely stares at the ground, his expression unreadable. BARRET continues to speak regardless, glowering vengefully at the peak of the pillar. BARRET: The upper world… a city on a plate. He slams his gun into the palm of his remaining hand. BARRET: It’s ‘cause of that &^#$# pizza that people underneath are sufferin’! And the city below is full of polluted air! On topa that, the Reactor keeps drainin’ up all the energy we got down here. He scowls as he goes on. BARRET: Nobody lives down here because they want to. Nobody wants to live every damn day wonderin’ if the next’ll come. But they ain’t got a choice. Ain’t got no money, or maybe… maybe they just love their land so damn much… CLOUD continues to avoid meeting BARRET’s eyes, staring blankly at the pavement. BARRET looks onward, his face straightening once more. BARRET: But it’s like I always say. The way we’re livin’… ‘s like a train. Can’t go nowhere except where its rails take it. Can’t make no stops. Not for nobody. CLOUD does not respond. Following a moment’s silence, BARRET glances hastily back at the trio of BIGGS, WEDGE, and JESSIE to see BIGGS running about carrying JESSIE’s headband and a huge grin. JESSIE shakes her fist as she runs after him, while WEDGE watches nervously from a distance. BARRET advances on the three of them. BARRET: Yo!! Get over here, all’ ya!! The group gathers around BARRET. BARRET: Listen up! This mission was a success! But don’t y’all get too damn confident! Things are just gonna get harder from here on out, so I can’t have y’all wimpin’ out on me if you get scared of the explosions! BARRET gestures into the slums ahead. BARRET: Meet back at headquarters! Move out! At the entrance to the neighborhood, a sign constructed from a large scrap of rusted metal reads “Sector 7”, hanging loosely from a wooden pole that is battered with staples and long-forgotten flyers. The sign itself has been sloppily spray-painted with white graffiti bearing the message “A little piece of hell.” CLOUD strides past the sign with his hands jammed into his pockets, in the direction of BARRET, who is shooing a group of men from the front steps of a small tavern. BARRET: Get outta here! Don’t go steppin’ all over her damn hospitality! CLOUD glances at a man nearby wearing a black leather jacket and sporting a head of flaming red hair. The man, JOHNNY, stumbles out of the bar and freezes at the sight of him, eyes widening in recognition. MAN: Heeeey, I know you… yeah… you’re… childhood friend! You’re from SOLDIER! Remember me? CLOUD stares at JOHNNY, his eyes wide in what appears to be fear as he becomes fairly disoriented. He sees a flash of light before being pulled from his reverie by the sound of BARRET’s voice calling him from the bar’s front steps. BARRET: Yo! Cloud! Get off your slow-movin’ ass! CLOUD looks up at BARRET, unresponsive as his fearful expression never falters. He glances back at JOHNNY before taking a step back. After a moment, he runs to the door of 7th Heaven in a haste. Oh yes. I did add Johnny into this. I love him, he's such a psycho. And I thought it was so random and interesting that he appeared in the game and started talking to Cloud about things that never really happened. And I also wanted to foreshadow what a mess Cloud's past is. I totally can't wait to write the Lifestream event.
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| i pRomiSe** | Jul 7 2006, 12:34 PM Post #14 |
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less qq, more pew pew.
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!!!! O_O!!! I wuv you Luna! I've always wanted to see FFVII in manga form, and you're actually gonna put the time to this? O_O;;;!!! This transcript is absolutely FANTABULOUS and I love how you edited/extended the scenes - they totally fit. And I love that, I think someone said this before, that you didn't overdo the descriptions. They are greatt~~ This doujunishi is gonna be amazing, I can tell you that. You are so talented, Luna~~ I cannot WAIT to see the finished product. <333
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Prepare for a LONG read, here we go!



I've been dying to do this for ages now. I promised myself I'd plunge right into it after AC was released, so here I am. 

This installation is pretty short. But, anyway, CLOUD! And weirdness with Jenova! And CLOUD! And the distortion of scenes. And CLOUD! And Clessie fangirlism! And more CLOUD!
HOMFG!! Luna ...you're a total freakin writing genious GODDESS!!!
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I must see Cloud with that daffodil behind his ear :lol:

you're still gonna blow me away with your talent 
And I also wanted to foreshadow what a mess Cloud's past is. I totally can't wait to write the Lifestream event. 
12:37 AM Jul 11