The Journey

Welcome to Calling All Writers. We hope you enjoy your visit.

You're currently viewing our forum as a guest. This means you are limited to certain areas of the board and there are some features you can't use. If you join our community, you'll be able to access member-only sections, and use many member-only features such as customizing your profile, sending personal messages, and voting in polls. Registration is simple, fast, and completely free.

Join our community!

If you're already a member please log in to your account to access all of our features:

The Journey; based on myself and my friends
Topic Started: Dec 22 2006, 10:44 PM (66 Views)
ScytherBreeder	Dec 22 2006, 10:44 PM Post #1
New Member Posts: 6 Group: Members Member #8 Joined: December 22, 2006	Chapter 1 ________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________ Well, we begin our story in a park. In this park is a tree. And under this tree are four friends. But before I get ahead of myself, let's get to know these four best friends. Let's start out with Mike, the oldest of the friends. He is 16 years old and has blonde hair and brown eyes. Mike has always been a very calm and collective guy. The second person is Bryanna. Bryanna is 14 years old and has long blonde hair and blue eyes. She also has glasses. Bryanna has always been very smart and isn't afraid of yelling at her little brother. Which brings me to the third person, Wesley. He is Bryanna's little brother. He is 12 years old and also has blonde hair and blue eyes. Wesley was very scrawny for his age but he still loved pokemon more then anything. Jesse is the last friend here. She is just now 10 years old and finally able to go on a Pokemon journey. She has bright blue hair and green eyes. She has never been concerned with having strong pokemon or winning all the time, like Mike. She has also favored the cute pokemon and lovable ones. So our friends are sitting at the tree. Usually they'd be playing pokemon games or talking about Mike's siblings and their adventures or Jesse's older brother and his adventures. But today was quiet. Tomorrow was Jesse's tenth birthday and they'd finally be able to start their pokemon journey. But they were sad that they were leaving this great life of luxary and happiness. They also knew that only one of them could become the ultimate champion. Mike stared up into space, thinking about what was coming up tomorrow. They would all recieve their first pokemon. Mike's mind wandered and he started thinking of his siblings. Mike had an older brother and sister and a younger sister, all of whom have started their pokemon journeys. He hadn't heard from them for a long time. He looked over at Bryanna, Wesley and Jesse. He thought to himself, "I could have left years ago and Bryanna could have come with me". But then we wouldn't all be together. Jesse was the only one really happy about leaving. She got up, stood in front of the crew and put her hands on her hips. " What are you guys moaping about? Don't you guys see? When we leave tomorrow, we will be leaving this great life we have here but we'll be starting a new one, a great one!" Bryanna then stood up. " Yeah! Ya know what!?! She's right!" Wesley then jumped up as well. "Yeah, let's do it!" Mike looked up and realized he was the only one not excited now. " Alright you guys, but let's wake up bright an early so we have a nice wide selection of starter pokemon to choose from. Wesley jumped up, shouting. He actually almost looked angry. "Yes! let's do it! Oh Yeah! Mike smiled. Bryanna just stared blankly at Wesley. "Calm down you little freak! Jeeze your like a disease!" Bryanna looked up. It was sunset. "Okay you guys, we better go, we can't stay up all night" They all got up and headed for their homes. Bryanna and Wesley went together obviously, as they are brother and sister. Tomorrow their journey begins. A path of challenges, rewards, and surprises, and best of all, POKEMON! ________________________________________________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________ Well thanks for reading everybody! This is only the first chapter! I hope to make more if you like them enough.
	I just ate a whole bunch of fibreglass insulation. It wasn't cotton candy like that guy said. My stomach's itchy.


nya_chan	Dec 24 2006, 01:24 PM Post #2
TeH g00fy admin (I wonder why no one takes me seriously...) Posts: 749 Group: Admin Member #1 Joined: December 14, 2006	you have interesting friends... :P



Ramzam	Dec 24 2006, 01:52 PM Post #3
Everybody's Favorite DDR Posts: 832 Group: Moderators Member #4 Joined: December 16, 2006	This is an interesting story, but there's one thing I noticed: rather than going to a new paragraph when a different character speaks, you went to a new paragraph when the character made an action. At least you didn't get too detailed with the descriptions--it tends to throw people off.
	All members of PCF may click this link to find the forums that, "replaced," it.


ScytherBreeder	Jan 3 2007, 05:58 PM Post #4
New Member Posts: 6 Group: Members Member #8 Joined: December 22, 2006	Chapter 2 ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Mike 's eyes opened to darkness. He was laying face down on his pillow. Unfortunatley this wasn't why he woke up. Mike woke up to a very loud " THUMP THUMP" sound. " Arg! What is that?" He waited for a second, trying to get back to the comfortable state he was in. THUMP THUMP! There it was again! This was starting to make Mike extremely annoyed. Finally, after a couple of minutes he got up and went downstairs. He saw the usually stuff down there, the family Hariyama sitting in the kitchen. When it saw Mike coming down the stairs, it got up and just stared at him. " Oh come on! I'm coming already! " Mike knew who it was at the door. Hariyama would usually get the door. It enjoyed doing little things for the family. But Hariyama couldn't answer the door for Jesse, because she was very scared of the muscular pokemon. A long time ago, Mike's father was researching in some hills just South of Simstock, the town they all live in, and he came across a small Makuhita stuck in some rocks. Mike's father immediately freed the small Pokemon. The Makuhita was overjoyed and promptly followed him home and helped him with the rest of the research. Ever since that day, Hariyama had been a loyal and faithful friend of Mike's father and their family. THUMP THUMP, went the door again. "Grrrr..iyama..." ,said Hariyama. Mike just took long deep yawn as he still came slowly but surely down the stairs. He passed the very ticked off pokemon and just patted it on it's head. "Calm down, spaz" Hairyama just sighed and went back to cleaning some research tools. Mike opened the door, slowly. No surprises, it was his youngest friend, Jesse. She looked as happy as ever. She was holding a pokeball in her hand and had a few more on her belt. Before Jesse could even say, "Hi!", Mike's eyes widened. He looked at Jesse, looked at the pokeball in her hand, then he turned his head and saw, flashing on the digital clock, 10:30AM! "AAAAAHHHHH!!! No! This can't be happening! Not today!" Jesse's smile sooned turned into a concerned and confused look. Mike was scrambling around looking for pants and anything decent to wear, not even caring that he was getting changed in front of a 10 year old girl. " Er..umm...Mi -?" Jesse couldn't even say one to Mike. He was too occupied at the moment and Jesse knew it. So she decided to just wait just outside. She was still a little terrified by the large Hariyama sitting in the kitchen. Jesse let out a sigh. She closed her eyes and brought the pokeball in her hand up to her heart. She sighed again and whispered to herself. " ...finally... " About three seconds later Mike ran out of the house. He grabbed Jesse's arm and ran towards Bryanna and wesley's house. This kind of shook Jesse out of her little moment but it was okay. About 2 minutes later, they arrived at Bryanna and Wesley's house. When they got there, they found Wesley sitting on the front porch, arms crossed, and a grumpy look on his face. Mike knew that look. It was the "my sister takes too long getting ready"- look. Wesley rolled his eyes. Mike nodded understandingly. Jesse looked confused. She looked at Wesley and then at Mike. "What? I don't get it" Not a moment after she said it, Bryanna walked outside looking very refreshed. Jesse then realized why Wesley was angry. "Oh wait, now I get it" Like everyone else, Bryanna was now ready to leave. The mood immediatley changed, when everyone looked over at Jesse. She was the only one holding a pokeball and 5 others on her belt. Jesse's 3 friends just stared at the pokeball for a second. "Oh you guys want to know which one I got?!? Well I chose a - " But before she could finish her sentence, the 3 of them darted over to Professor Burke's, where they would receive their first pokemon, hopfully. Jesse just sighed and started to walk over to Prof. Burke's to meet up with her friends. She was just itching to leave. When Bryanna, Wesley, and Mike got to Prof. Burke's, no other pokemon trainers were there. It didn't look good at all. Wesley started to fret. " Oh well that's just great! That's just perfect! He probably has no more pokemon left. " Mike spoke up. " Come on, Wes. Prof. Burke knows us. I wouldn't be surprised if he set out 4 pokemon just for us. " I doubt it, but let's just go inside.", said Bryanna. They walked inside. They saw Prof. Burke and his wife cleaning the lab. It was pretty messy. There must have been at least 20 trainers wanting their first pokemon that morning. Mike, Bryanna, and Wesley walked in and looked around. Bryanna was about to say hello, when Burke interrupted her. " Good morning you guys! I suppose your here to get your pokemon too. " " Yes, exactly " "Yeah" " If its not too much trouble. " " Ha ha! " ,Burke laughed. " Look you guys, you're all late. But I have some good news and some bad news. " " Oh I knew it! We can never become trainers! And we're banned from all pokemon forever! " , yelled Wesley. Bryanna's face blushed. She grabbed the nearest object she could find, which just happened to be a microscope. She grabbed it and whaled it over Wesley's head. " Shut up you little twerp! " Wesley nursed his wound, while Burke returned to explaining the good and bad news. "Okay?.. Anyway, as I was saying, the good news is that I have some pokemon for you. The bad news is that there are limited choices, very limited in fact." Mike started looking a little worried. He tryed to make it look like he wasn't. " Umm... Just how limited are we talking about here? " Next thing you know, Burke showed them out to the backyard and to a small pen of Eevees. There was about 10 of them in there. They were jumping around, climbing over eachother, and it seemed like they were having a lot of fun. Bryanna's eyes widened. She gave a huge smile and hearts appeared in her eyes. Wesley and Mike just looked at eachother awkwardly. Bryanna really seemed to like them. " Oh my gosh! This is too perfect! They're so cute! " Bryanna bent down and took a look at them all. One of the Eevees hopped over to her and licked her nose. Bryanna got so excited that she picked it up and twirled it around. She cuddled it and even did little eskimo kisses with it. But then she realized that Burke, Mike and Wesley were watching her with the strangest look on their faces. A weirded out look. " Umm..Heh heh. Eevee return." And with that, Bryanna returned Eevee into it's new pokeball in a small burst of red light. She then sat down in embarassment. Mike was next. He walked over to the pen of Eevees. He looked at them all. They weren't all exactly alike. Some were thinner, some were fatter, some had bigger ears. Mike wanted the perfect Eevee. He patted them all on the head until he came a particular one. This Eevee, when Mike scratched behind it's ears, it didn't hesitate in taking a nice big chomp on Mike's hand. " AAAAHHHH!!! It bit me!!.....I'll take it." Burke looked puzzled. "Really? You want that one? Okay, it's yours" Mike thought it was a fighter. He returned it to it's pokeball, satisfied. Wesley was of course next up. It wasn't hard for wes to choose. While Bryanna and Mike were choosing, he had his eye on a certain one. He thought this Eevee was special. He knelt down by the pen and looked at the Eevee. This Eevee had tattered fur and sharper then normal teeth. It looked very agitated and angry. Wesley just stared at it in amazement. He could already picture the Eevee in battle, going balistic on its victims. " I got to have that one, Prof. Burke. Please! " " I don't know, Wes. We've been having some problems with it. But, then again, it might be nice to get it out of my hair. I won't have to worry about it anymore. " Prof. Burke smiled. "Fine, you can take it, but just be careful, okay? " Wesley's face lit up. He got up and grabbed an empty pokeball from the rack. And tossed it at his new Eevee. "Okay Eevee, return!" But the red beam that usually takes the pokemon inside was taking longer then normal to capture the Eevee. Wesley got a little annoyed. The beam was surrounding the Eevee but you could tell that it was fighting it off. Only after about a minute did it finally carry the Eevee inside. "Whoa! That's how you know it's a strong pokemon!" Only after all 3 of them recieved their pokemon, did they all realize that Jesse wasn't there. But soon Jesse arrived at the door. She was panting and looked angry. "Hey you guys! Thanks for running off like that! Real nice! ( sarcastic, of course ) Wait. You guys have your pokemon now too!?! That's great! Which ones did you choose?" The three looked at eachother and then back at Jesse. Mike cleared his throat. "Umm...We all got... Eevees. We had no choice. What did you choose? I'm going to guess a Skitty, right?" " Wow! You guys are never going to believe it but look!" With that, Jesse reached for her belt and grabbed a pokeball. And with pride, she lifted it in the air and through it. " Eevee! Go!!!!" In an instant, a beautiful young Eevee appeared. It had a shiny fur coat that shimmered in the sunlight. The others couldn't believe their eyes. They all had Eevees! Mike knew that he would have to work extra hard at trying to be the strongest, since he didn't have any kind of advantage over anyone else. He felt that with him being the oldest, he wanted to be the strongest and most reliable out of the group. After a small goodbye meal with Prof. Burke and his wife, the 4 friends left town. They passed the " Now Leaving Simstock " sign. As they did, they all looked at eachother and knew that this was only the beginning. ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Well that's chapter 2 for you all. I hope you like it. I'm sorry about the different style of setting up the dialogue, I think I'm going to use this style from now on. Please let me know if I should write a 3rd chapter. Some new characters will be introduced soon. So it's all good.
	I just ate a whole bunch of fibreglass insulation. It wasn't cotton candy like that guy said. My stomach's itchy.


nya_chan	Jan 3 2007, 06:20 PM Post #5
TeH g00fy admin (I wonder why no one takes me seriously...) Posts: 749 Group: Admin Member #1 Joined: December 14, 2006	It's really good! I like it!



Ramzam	Jan 4 2007, 05:21 PM Post #6
Everybody's Favorite DDR Posts: 832 Group: Moderators Member #4 Joined: December 16, 2006	ScytherBreeder Jan 3 2007, 05:58 PM " AAAAHHHH!!! It bit me!!.....I'll take it." LOL! Anyway, it's a good (and funny at times) story. My "spaz box" broke, so my story's just basically what the title says. Anyway, it's okay. I don't really have any other compliments.
	All members of PCF may click this link to find the forums that, "replaced," it.


1 user reading this topic (1 Guest and 0 Anonymous)


« Previous Topic · Stories · Next Topic »