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| BaZul | Jul 12 2009, 04:24 AM Post #21 |
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Is that a compliment or what? xD What are you implying? Edit: I'll make the Chapters longer, if thats part of what your telling me. Edit x2: Someone reads it! D: I thought im writing it only to my friends in steam xD No one told me how it is, atleast Up untill now. Have you read everything 'till now? :3 I wanna know what you think! xD |
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| Tom_AIAC | Jul 12 2009, 01:21 PM Post #22 |
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No, that was a compliment, don't worry. Take it as a "bravo for keeping it up!" I honestly haven't gotten to read too much of it. Usually when I'm in front of the computer I'm always working on AIAC, so I don't have a lot of time to just look at stuff. But when I do get to look it over, of course I'll tell you how it is
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| BaZul | Jul 13 2009, 04:45 AM Post #23 |
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Chapter Fourteen: The Enemy Of My Enemy Is My Friend - Din closes the door and locks it, then he starts walking in the same hallway. - Din: " So, they are called 'The Haikasho' ? " Jack: " Yes, and by the looks of it, it will be very difficult taking them down. " Din: " Yes, thats correct. Especially alone. we will need some backup. " Jack: " You mentioned that Brotherhood of yours, maybe we can ask for help there? " Din: " Hmm... Could be, but you fought against Rayne. " Jack: " Is that a big deal? " Din: " It is, you see, Rayne is a high ranked member within the brotherhood. And due to the fact you fought him, your a enemy of the Brotherhood. " Jack: " So much for that. " Din: " Not necessarily... You see, Rayne reported accomplishment Of your death, Thus, everyone will think your dead. " Jack: " So they will recognize me? " Din: " Not Entirely, you see, you have battled him while you wer still with The Haikasho's Controll, you dident have your real face. " Jack: " So they wont know me? " Din: " They wont see you as Jack, but they will sure Hear you like him. " Jack: " How can i alter my voice? " Din: " I dont know, i know you can do it, but i dont know how... For the meantime, You gotta play Mute. " Jack: " -sigh- Allright, ill try my best. " Din: " Dont worry, let me do the talking. " Jack: " Where are we going, anyways? " Din: " We are meeting up with the Brotherhood, thaier entarance is just up here. " - Din escorts Jack to a door, Din presses the intercom - Intercom: " Who is it? " Din: " The Hawk " Intercom: " Allright, let me open up for you. " - After the Intercom ends, Music Slowly gets louder and closer. As Din Opens the Door, The Sound clears itself, a Nightclub is beyond the door, Jack follows Din without saying a word, passing every single person Inside, Din is stopped by Two People, asking him something, but Jack cannot hear becouse Of the music, Din is premmited inside and Jack enters with him, the music Becomes less Loud as they continue threw a secured hall, to one door. They are infront of a Wooden Door, and the music cannot be heard anymore. Din enters, and a very large Atrium is seen, and people are passing by, Some with Gear on them, some without, All of them are busy, and they all have the same Image on thaier clothing. Din whispers to Jack... - Din: " Whatever you do or happens, dont attract any attention, and dont speak. " - Someone heads up to Din. - Din: " Yeah, What is it Volture? " Volture: " What are you doing here? and who is he? " Din: " This is... " - Din looks at Jack, and he Nods - Din: " Jack, this is Jack. " Volture: " Allright, Jack, WHy did you bring him here? " Din: " I've watched him for some time, he is a very good recruit. " Volture: " Ill be the judge of that. " Din: " Not really, He is going with Ken, he is Mute. " Volture: " Humph, Fine then, you know the place. " Din: " Yeah, i'll escort him. " Volture: " Remember the Code, Din, You brought him, He is your responsibility. " Din: " Roger. " Volture: " Now go, i need to meet up with other people, hurry. " - Volture Goes away, while Din Signals Jack to Follow him. As they pass by, they see training halls, many of them, Many armories and Stores, Bedrooms and Lounges. Din enters one Large Training Room, Din enters with Jack. Jack sees someone heading near him. ((Ken Uses Hand Language, {translation})) - Ken: {What are you doing here?} Din: " I watched this person, he is a very good Recruit, and he is mute, so im Directing him to you. " Ken: -Sigh- {I dont need any more Recruits.} Din: " I cant just let him go, not after he seen this place. " Ken: {Fine, Does he know Hand Language?} Din: " Jack? " - Jack Looks at Ken for a minute, Then he nods. - Ken: {Allright then, Tell your friends on Recon not to send anymore people.} Din: " Will do, Ken. " - Din whispers to Jack - Din: " Try not to get in trouble, Ill see you later. " - Din waves goodbye to Ken and to Jack and leaves while Closing the door. Ken Points to Jack to go to a place in the Training room with the rest. And so begins His First lesson with Ken...- End of Chapter Fourteen |
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| BaZul | Jul 14 2009, 08:50 AM Post #24 |
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Chapter Fifteen: Star Pupil - Jack Goes out of the Training Room and sees Din waiting for him Din signals Jack to come closer so he will whipser and no one will notice them Talking - Din: " So? How'd it go? " Jack: " It was too easy, im the best person in the class. " Din: " Great, Now your in. " Jack: " So simple? " Din: " Well... erm.. No, You will be given Missions from any of the Higher Ranked. " Jack: " Thats it? " Din: " Well, you gotta get approved by all of the Major Ranked in the brotherhood, To be in the Brotherhood itself, as a Novice. " Jack: " Ill get started then, who are the Majors? " Din: " There is Volture and Ken, Me and Moth, Vinnie and... Rayne. " Jack: " -sigh- Allright, can you explain a bit? " Din: " Sure. " In The Brotherhood, there are a few areas that we need to master. Hand-To-Hand Combat, Intelligance and Firearms. In Hand-To-Hand Combat, we learn every single one, master all of them, and Use whatever we see fit. In Intelligance, its pretty simple, you gotta know and prepare, knowladge is power. In other words, You gotta know everything that is required in your mission, Recon In other words, i suppose. and Firearms, is the mastery of weapons, the abillity to use and handle any kind Of weapon, Know everything about everything related to That Subject, Weapons And Firearms. You must be approved by atleast Five People between the Six to be able to pass And become a 'Novice' within the Brotherhood, the more you put into the Brotherhood, The higher rank you will be, but some never managed to pass many levels due to Many years of work to become just a Novice. Din: " I can give you my Approval right now, but i must give you some sort of a Mission Or challange. Jack: " Allright, where can i find the rest? " - Din hands Jack a Map of the entire Brotherhood building - Din: " Take this, it will help you out, keep learning and stay Sharp for anything. " Jack: " Allright, I should head with Ken First, then continue on. " Din: " Suit yourself, just do your best, Your room within the Brotherhood Quarters Is 'H-8', allright? " Jack: " Allright. " - The Screen Fades out as Jack leaves Din and heads with the rest of the crowd. - End of Chapter Fifteen |
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| BaZul | Jul 23 2009, 05:53 AM Post #25 |
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Chapter Sixteen Pt. 1: The Left Side of The Brain - Jack Heads out from the Room, and heads to Din - Din: " Yeah, what is it? " Jack: {I need to talk to you in Private} Din: " Ok. " - Jack Escorts Din to the other end of the Atrium, away from the rest - Jack: " Im gonig to get the Novice Rank, and i need to start now. " Din: " Sure, its your call, after all. " Jack: " And i want you to be the first that i head to. " Din: " Allright, Then here is your Task, Go out and head Downtown, The Police Chief Is meeting someone, i need you to get me a picture of who it is. " Jack: " Sounds easy enoff, collecting info. " Din: " Its harder than you think, im sending you this becouse its harder, His Bodyguards will be watching over him the whole time, and it will be hard to get a good Picture, thats why i am giving you this. " Jack: " Fair enoff. " Din: " Trust me when i say this, but this is very easy, the rest wont be like this. " Jack: " Ok, im off now. " Din: " Bye. " - Jack goes the other direction as Din Goes, The screen turns around to see Volture On the Staircase, looking at Jack as he leaves. Jack Continues Walking the street, armed with his Pistol of Sanity, hidden from Everyone. Jack sees the PD from far away, and heads into it. When he enters, he sees many cops working hard in maintaining the cought criminals And in the counter with the people. Jack heads towards one of the cops. - Jack: " Hello, Officer, Can you direct me to the Chief's Office? " Cop: " Is he expecting you? " Jack: " Yes, he is. " Cop: " Head up the stairs then, go near the end of the hallway and turn right, you'll See the door from there. " Jack: " Thank you, Officer. " Cop: " Yeah, Yeah. " - Jack heads upstairs, and goes threw the Hallway, he turns right and sees the Chief's Office door Slightly Open, he Heads towards it and goes inside, to find it Empty completly. Jack goes to the Table, and sees a Note. The Note says as following: Meet me in the Safe Location we agreed on, i think we have problems over here Jack stands up, and turns around to see a Picture of a large House, He opens the Frame and takes the picture, scrolling it and hiding it. Jack leaves the PD, in search of the House quickly. - End of Part One of Chapter Sixteen |
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| BaZul | Jul 27 2009, 02:19 PM Post #26 |
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Im Sorry guys, im running into troubles with my Internet, not to mention that my Bar-Mitzva is just a few days away. I am taking a little break on the Fiction, to finish stuff with my RL Life. In the meantime, you can have this picture in relation to the Next part of Chapter 16! Take it as, a little look on the fact that i will be making more pictures soon ;D There is something hidden inside the picture, can you find it?
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| BaZul | Aug 22 2009, 01:53 PM Post #27 |
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Episode Sixteen Pt. 2: ...Controlls the Right Arm - Jack walks uphill to see a large house, He looks At the house and slides down to it. Jack Steps infront of the door and suddenly... - Volture: " Stop right there, Jack. " - Jack Turns around - Volture: " What the hell are you doing here, and Speak up, i know you arent mute. " Jack: " Maybe YOU can tell me what the hell are you doing here? " - Volture opens his eyes, he recognizes the voice. - Volture: " You... " Jack: " Happy to meet you. " Volture: " You are to leave now, and never return to us. " Jack: " Now thats quite a large request... " Volture: " Do so, or else. " Jack: " Or else what? " - Volture Takes a fighting Stance - Volture: " Or else i'll finish what Rayne couldent. " - Jack Pulls out the Pistol of Sanity - Jack: " Lets see you. " Volture: " Wait, Is that The Pistol? " Jack: " Oh, so you know about this. " Volture: " Put that pistol down! Quickly! " Jack: " Really? i think not. " - Jack Cocks the pistol and aims at Volture - Volture: " You have no idea what that thing does. " Jack: " Oh, but i do. " Volture: " No! You Dont! whatever you do, Dont use it! " Jack: " Make me! " - Jack Shoots the Pistol At Volture, But missing him as Volture Dodges. - Volture: " You Freakin' Retard! " Jack: " Lets see you Fight! " - Volture Runs towards Jack, Dodging The Fire from the Pistol, Swiftly Doing a Uppercut At Jack, but Jack dodges, and counters him, Nearly Putting him down, but Volture Stands up, And Heads to strike him with his Elbow And and once he is close, the Screen spazzes in Effect seen ago, And then... * BOOOM * The House Explodes, Volture and Jack flies from the Shockwave, but in the middle, It stops, and Two Suited men arrive from inside the explotion. Heading towards Jack that is frozen in time at the air. - Man #1: " So, we finally found you. " Man #2: " Its nice to see you Face to Face, Im Carcer. " Man #1: " My name is non of Importance to you, Though. " Carcer: " Thank you for signaling us your location, Jack. " Man #1: " Yes, it is most appritiated. " Carcer: " Sadly, We have only use of you, and not Him. " Man #1: " We will leave him be for now, but you have marked him with us. " Carcer: " Why yes, and i am most thankful for that. " Man #1: " Now you will come with us... " - Suddenly, The Two Men are shot threw thaier Chests, falling on the ground, Behind them stands a man, covered by a Black Ski Mask, Hood and Cloak. He avoids eye contact with Jack, he holsters his Pistol, and walks away. Jack slowly regains Back to the Current Time, and Flies to a nearby car and crashes on it. Jack Lies on the car, but Volture is no where to be seen. Jack Remains on the car, wounded by the explotion, closing his eyes and the Screen fades black as we go furthur away from him in the sights of the demolished Building's Ruins. - End of Chapter Sixteen ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Editor's Note: --------------- Sorry for not updating in a LOOOONNNGGG time, Once i fidn a good game, i cant Stop playing it :lol: Also, i STILL need a Opinion on my Fiction! i want Reviews, Damnit xP I just want to know how you guys think it is, plus, how to Imporve and stuff :3 Just get Readin' Everyone, Becouse if you know how much is a Era, that is what You will be seeing... erm.. eventually! ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- |
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| Tom_AIAC | Aug 23 2009, 12:50 PM Post #28 |
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I'm so swamped with stuff I need to do right now, so I don't really have time to read all this I'm afraid. Can anyone out there gives BaZul some thoughts on his writing? Pay it forward y'all. |
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| BaZul | Aug 29 2009, 11:19 AM Post #29 |
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Another Picture in Relation To Chapter Sixteen ![]() Hope you Enjoy it and be sure to expect even More Pics :] ![]() It looks like Jack is holding the door, but dont be fooled, its my bad Camera Angeling. They both are actually in the air, just FYI. |
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| BaZul | Sep 10 2009, 11:11 AM Post #30 |
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Chapter Seventeen: Wakey Wakey! * Jack opens his eyes slowly, and hears and sees the room he is at, seeing that he Is in a Hospital, he is shocked, he sits up on the bed, turns around and sees Din * Jack: " Wha...whats going on?.. " Din: " You crashed into a car, you fell uncounches. " Jack: " Really? and how did you figure that out? " Din: " You should keep quiet, there are people waiting for you outside the door. " Jack: " Is it Volture? or Rayne? " Din: " Um... no, not really. " Jack: " Then who? " Din: " You know what? Comeon, i'll show you. " * Din helps him stand up and walk outside the room Jack turns his head and sees alot of People from Kens Class that he was in waiting For him to feel better, once they notice they go to him, and greet to him * Din: " Its your Fanboys, Jack. " * Jack looks at Din and sighs, then he keeps going, heading outside * Jack leaves the people behind him, and Din catches up with him. * Din: " woah, woah, where are you going? " Jack: " I was knocked out for a long time, let me see some sunshine. " Din: " We have serious problems, you know. " Jack: " What problems? " Din: " Volture is gone missing, and the entire people are worried, becouse without Him, no one can advance anywhere. " Jack: " I see... " Din: " Is there a problem? you know what happend to him? " Jack: " I think The Haikasho took him, probably. " Din: " Wait, what? How? " Jack: " I dont know, look, im really exhausted, my head hurts badly and i cant think stright, Let me relax abit, ok? " Din: " Allright, but im going to checkup on you later. " Jack: " Fine. " * Jack steps outside into a large park outside the Hospital, he walks around and sees the people around him, his expression on what he is seeing, is like it was the first time he does. * Man: " Jack? " * Jack turns around. * Moses: " My name is Moses, can i talk with you abit? " * Jack nods, and they walk forward together in the park, the Screen goes upwards looking in the sky, as a hawk flies above following them. * End of Chapter Seventeen |
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| BaZul | Sep 23 2009, 12:26 PM Post #31 |
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Sorry guys, im abit busy ATM, but i'll get into it on making the next Chapter soon, meanwhile, here is another Filler Picture in the events of one of the chapters :]![]() aaaand you guys are the first to get a sneak peak into something else im doing ![]() Hope you enjoy it! ![]() ![]()
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| BaZul | Sep 27 2009, 02:05 AM Post #32 |
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Chapter Eighteen: Taking matters in your own hands Jack: " So what is it you wanted to talk to me about? " Moses: " I presume you heard that Volture has gone missing, and i see that you are from Ken's Apprentices. " Jack: " Yes, I heard and I am. " Moses: " Well then, let me intreduce my self, as i said, my name is Moses, and i lead Spec Op Devision, that means a merge of Combat and Intelligance. Now, i am running the search for Volture, and i require assistance. " Jack: " I see... " Moses: " Now, i got two things for you, and its your position to choose what it will be. " Jack: " Allright, what are these Options? " Moses: " You can eaither help us search for Volture, it will help us Greatly, or you can take his Position untill we find him. " Jack: " Woah, um, im not so sure. " Moses: " Dont you worry, take your time, but do note that we dont have forever. " Jack: " Allright, i'll get back to you. " Moses: " Thank you. " Jack: " Bye. " - Moses leaves Jack, and Jack stays where he is, as Din walks to him. - Din: " Hm, who is he? " Jack: " You dont know him? " Din: " He looks fremilliar, i seen him several times, but i never gotten a close look or a Intreduction. " Jack: " Yeah... Anyways, did you get me released from here? " Din: " Um.. Yeah, but where are we going to head to? " Jack: " Where else? Back to the Brotherhood. " Din: " Are you sure? Rayne is back there, and most likely head up to me once i enter, But what did that man talk to you about? " Jack: " Hmm, i see, then where do you suggest? " Din: " Stop avoiding the Subject, Jack. " Jack: " Fine, he gave me a decision to make. " Din: " Which is? " Jack: " Eaither take Volture's Position untill he is found, or help searching for him. " Din: " Wow, thats pretty hard. " Jack: " I know, anyways, im heading back in to collect my stuff, where to meet you? " Din: " I have a car, i'll wait for you out front and lead you to the car. " Jack: " Allright, see you there. " - Jack and Din head diffarant ways, as the hawk that was looking above them starts to fly away. - End of Chapter Eighteen -------------------------------------------- Author's Notes: So, what do you think Jack should do? What will you decide if you wer him? -------------------------------------------- |
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| BaZul | Oct 6 2009, 10:16 AM Post #33 |
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Chapter Nineteen: Wanted Attention - a door is opened, and the the lights are turned on, Din is there, and Jack Behind Him, Din shows Jack the room... - Din: " Well this is where you'll be staying for now, but dont get too comfortable, you wont be staying here for long. " Jack: " Allright, im gonig to lay down for a little bit, then i'll head downstairs. " Din: " Allright, im gonig to get the rest of your stuff inside, i'll put them in the Living room, when you'll have the time, take them and sort them out. " Jack: " Ok. " - Din leaves the room, Jack lies down on the Bed, closing his eyes slowly, and after a few seconds, he opens them, and finds himself in a large black room, when the Only thing inside is him and the bed. - *** What the hell? - Jack thinks for himself, and then footsteps are heard, a suited man heads to him - Man: " Hey there. " Jack: " Wait a minute... Manica? " Manica: " Suprised to see me? " Jack: " What is gonig on? How did you survive? " Manica: " I was suprised aswell, comeon, we dont have much time. " Jack: " What do you mean? " Manica: " I managed to get you here, but soon they will figure out and kill me and Send you back, we need to make this quick. " Jack: " Ok, but what to do? " Manica: " I got you here becouse i need you to free me. " Jack: " How Can i do that? " Manica: " You see, some people within The Haikasho, like 1/100, have a Human Form that is living, so i need you to free me, so i will be utturly into my Human Form. My Human form is allready suffering dreadfully, and the punishment i recived here is far greater, and i cant deal with so much pain, you have to free me, i beg of you. " Jack: " But i dont know how " Manica: " I need you to find my Human Form, and take a Item that is Most precious to him, I dont remember much about him, so you'll need to figure it out By yourself, once you get that item, bring it to me, it will cause a Paradox for me, and the Failsafe will cause me to form exactly into my Human form without any Memory of The Haikasho, thats where you come in, you will befriend with me, and I will remember you, and head for you, i allready managed to make a program that will run once the Failsafe is enganged, so dont worry about me attempting to Find you. " Jack: " So why did you bring me here? " Manica: " You will never be able to find me, I am seperated by Human Eyes, but You can accsess to my location by entering a certin loction within The Void. Follow me, and Hurry! We spent too much time as it is! " - Manica leads Jack around, even though nothing is seen but darkness, there are Walls around, slowly becoming a actual hall, tiles appear, and walls slowly build, and Manica shows him a door. - Manica: " The moment you enter and close that door, You will be close to my Location, Just ask for someone by my Name. " Jack: " Allright, Manica. " Manica: " Name's Joseph. " Jack: " Allright, Bye Joseph. " - Jack Enters threw the door, and Joseph walks away, back into The Void. - End of Chapter Nineteen |
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| BaZul | Oct 17 2009, 12:08 PM Post #34 |
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Several News: 1. Im going to put a slight hold on the Fiction due to the other reasons, but not for long, just for a liiittle while. 2. Im working on a other story, that will be taking form as a Text RP, most likely over in this Forum. 3. Im going on a 2 day trip on the 18th, and i'll be back on the next day (19th, prolly in the evening) 4. Im 85% Sure that i will make the Group for the Machinima i talked about. That was the News Bulletien! i'll catch you all Later! |
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| BaZul | Oct 29 2009, 02:43 AM Post #35 |
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Chapter Twenty Part One: Wrong Turn? - As Jack closes the door, he turns and finds himself at the backdoor of a building that is falling apart, out in the slums of a city, being stared at from homeless and sick people. Looking around for a way out, he is being addresed by the people for help, He finally finds a exit, and he sees that it is under tyranny, its Martial Law here. Suddenly a Officer appreaches him.. - Officer: " You, Identify yourself, Now!" Jack: " My name is Jack. " Officer: " Wiseguy i see, Well you're coming with me. " - The Officer Grabs Jack's Arm and drags him, he is extremly powerful and Jack Cant let go, he notices he is heading towards a large tower. - *MEANWHILE* Din: " Jack! You Ready?! Comeon, We need to go! " - Din Heads upstairs, towards Jack's Room... - Din: " Jack? " - Din opens the door, but Jack is gone and only Pitch-Black smoke is on the bed And then a gun is pointing at the back of Din's Head. - *Back to Jack's Location* - Jack and the officer are infront of a large Mechanical Door - Officer: " Stand up, and Stand Still! " - The Large door opens and Three men head towards Jack, Two Grabing both each arm, and the third Punching him in the Stomach, then they drag him in the Tower And the door closes. As they go Deeper, the Tower is more dark and shows more sinister doings to People, shouts of pain are heard from across the Halls. - Jack: " What is going on? Where are you taking me? " Man #1: " You know perfectly, you probably been there plenty of times. " - Jack raises his head and sees a Door named "Chamber 402" from the distance, But then the man punches his head down, and they continue... " End of Part One of Chapter Twenty |
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| BaZul | Nov 8 2009, 07:58 AM Post #36 |
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Chapter Twenty, Part Two: M.I.A. - Jack is thrown inside the room, he struggles to move, he looks around to see where he is. - Officer: " You need help with this one? " - A Geared, Soldier like officer talks back in a strange voice from the headgear - Geared Officer: " Nah, im good, i'll contact you for evacuation of this person once im done. " Officer: " Got it. " - The door closes and the Geared Unit looks at Jack, he then heads to a computer-like console - Geared Officer: " Stay Put. " - Jack keeps trying to stand up, but fails, The geared Officer starts a Transmition in the console, and it gets accepted and displayed on a large screen. - Transmition: " Yes 402, what is it? im abit Busy here and i cant have anyone to Bother me. " '402': " Sorry sir, but i was ordered to contact you. we have a new person here and they wished that you will come here to handle things. " Transmition: " Im sorry 402, but i cant, im too cought up with my own work! " '402': " But, Sir! " Transmition: " I know about the consequences of Unfulfilling a Order and dont worry, I... " '402': " Jospeh! I am ordered to ger you here by all costs, So you will head over here, Right NOW! " Transmition: " 402! Never, EVER, Adress me by my name! for that burst you will be punished, but for your requirment, Fine, i will come there as soon as i can. " '402': " Yes, im sorry, understood, I will detain the man for and untill your arrival. " - The Transmition Ends and '402' heads to jack... - *** MEANWHILE *** Man: " Well, its nice to meet you again, Daniel, or shall i say 'Din' " Din: " What do you want? " Man: " Why dont you tell me? you could allready know. " Din: " Well you havent killed me, yet, so i presume you want something from me, The question is what, i think it has something to do with your Main and Perfect Subject. " Man: " Very well done, it seems that you do know, but thats not all, We know all about your plan, and we still laugh to how pitiful and stupid it is, If you noticed, Jack Dissapeared, And we cant seem to find him, your one of our prime suspects in this little case. " Din: " I am no less suprised of his disappearance than you, I have no idea where he is or where he is heading. " Man: " Ah, but you most likely know HOW he was heading to that location, you know the path but not the Destination, how ironic, dont you think? " Din: " Perhaps, but why should i help you? " Man: " I think you forgot abit about us, have you? let me refreash your memory... " Din: " You wouldent harm me, im a needed and required source of infromation. " Man: " Oh no, wer not going to harm you, but i would like to tell you this... Welcome Back... " End of Part Two of Chapter Twenty |
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| BaZul | Dec 3 2009, 08:58 AM Post #37 |
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Chapter Twenty One: What'll be? - The door opens, Joseph Enters the room as Jack is restrained to a Torture Chair - Joseph: " 402, You allready know about my casefile, i cannot be disturbed on these times, its important that no one contacts me untill the case drops. " '402': " I Understand sir, but it was important that you will come here, you needed to come here anyways, now that he knows your name and my codenumber he needs a wipe. " Joseph: " Yeah, yeah... so, what do we have here? " '402': " Disrespecting a Officer, Not complying a Direct order, Resisting Arrest And i think he might be a 10-66, probably a 314 and 415 " Joseph: " Eh, the 402 Usual? " '402': " Possibly, So what will it be? " Joseph: " Allright, We have two options, eaither the advanced hardship plan with a wipe, or a rehabilitation program. " '402': " Who will make the choice? " Joseph: " Why not the Commiter? " '402': " Im not sure if its a good idea, if they will find out... " Joseph: " Let them add it to my case, no biggy, its allready packed out. " '402': " I see, well, i will talk to him and give him the options, i will meet you in secotr B6-N, we need to discuss about a very important issue. " Joseph: " Allright, ill be heading out then, be quick about it. " '402': " Yes sir. " - Joseph leaves the room, and as the camera turns, we see Din infront of five Members of the Haikasho, talknig to Din. - Man #3: " I heard about the message, I had to come to see if its true. " Man #1: " Oh its true, i've found Daniel, and there he is. " Din: " How did you find me? " Man #1: " Why ofcourse, you see, we all know that you are the only person that has a certin Immunity from our controll, thats why you wer free from our Controll, or as you claim, Unlocked, but you forgot one thing, even tough You warent directly controlled by us, we allways keep a basic file in each of our pawns... " Man #2: " Every person has this thing, its a invisible chip in the brain, it grants that person one special abillity, sadly it dosent have any tracking device when it SHOULD have... " - He looks at the person in his right - Man #1: " Anyways, your abillity is a neutrilizer and a effect Generator, you wer special, You wer supposed to be in Jack's Position. but ofcourse, you ran away before we could take controll, so we used the backup subject, which is Jack. " Man #4: " Your effect on Jack was Belief and Trust, something we made sure he wont have for anyone. " Man #5: " Look, here is the plan we have for now, We want you to continue working with Jack on your own so-called 'plan' on taking us down, and give us a direct report on his progress and about your own progress within the Mission, or you are going to return to your postion awaiting for you Within The Haikasho, what will it be? " Din: " I need some time to think about it... " Man #1: " Allright, if you say so, But we arent leaving our sights from you. " - Din walks downstairs, as the five members makes way for him. The screen returns to to Jack's Location, alone in the dark room restrained to the Metal Interigation Chair with a spotlight on him. Jack moves his head to the side to see whats going on around him, jack lowers his head, to reveal a member of the Haikasho looking at him from behind him... - End of Chapter Twenty One |
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| Tom_AIAC | Dec 3 2009, 05:27 PM Post #38 |
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| BaZul | Dec 31 2009, 05:04 AM Post #39 |
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Chapter Twenty Two: Grand Escape - Jack Looks at the door, he closes his and after awhile opens them again, but when he opens his eyes the door is gone, Jack notices someone is breaking him out of the metal interigation chair, Jack stands up slowly and looks back, he sees a hooded man in the shadow of the room, he points out to Jack to follow him, and he starts walking to a back door, Jack follows him to a storage room filled with boxes... - Jack: " Who are you? " Hooded Man: " It dosen't matter now, we need to get you to safty. " - The hooded man piles up some boxes to a ventellation shaft, he goes on the boxes and breaks the shaft entarance out, then he throws it aside, he points to Jack to stay close and heads inside the vent. Jack climbs up slowly up the boxes, he hears the main door opening, he climbs quickly inside the shaft, and when the back door opens, 402 goes in... the pile of boxes are gone, and the vent isent even there. Jack and the hooded man exit the shaft from a other side, outside, behind the building, they brush themselves off... - Hooded Man: " Can you run? " Jack: " Yeah? " Hooded Man: " Good, you'll need that skill, Comeon, Follow my lead. " - The Hooded Man sprints up right and runs up a wall, he grabs the ledge and climbs up, he then points Jack to come up, Jack runs and jumps up and grabs the ledge, he nearly slipped when the hooded man helps him up, They continue on running and climbign and jumping series of buildings heading furthur and furthur away from the large Tower. They reach a roof, Jack is breathing heavily from the long run, while the hooded man dosen't, the hooded man points out to an old abandoned factory up in the distance, the man pats on Jack's back and then jumps down, Jack moans and follows him. The screen heads back to the interigation chamber when 402 starts a video chat on his screen, the chat is accepted... - Unit #402: " Sir... we got a serious problem... " End of Chapter Twenty One |
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| BaZul | Jan 13 2010, 12:04 PM Post #40 |
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Chapter Twenty Three: Deja Vu? - The man helps Jack as they walk upwards to a cliff-like edge, the man points to the entarance to a abandoned old factory, he helps Jack slide down slowly down the ledge, after Jack reaches the bottom, the man follows and heads to him. The man helps Jack as the go threw a security booth right outside the entarance to the factory, he opens the old gate and goes in after Jack, then close the gate. - Jack: " This place seems... fremilliar... " Man: " I dont think so, no one been here for years, well, technicly speaking. Comeone, you'll get your answers soon, let me get you to our leader so he can explain. " Jack: " Allright... " - Jack follows the man inside, threw a lounge and to a hallway... - Man: " Its just around the corner. " - Jack sees a door, and on it reads 'Managment Office'. - Jack: " Im sure i've been here before. " Man: " Allright, you go ahead, i need to do some things, you go inside, he will explain to you everything. " Jack: " Just.. step in? " Man: " Yeah, dont worry. " Jack: " If you say so. " - Jack heads to the Office and the man walks back from where they came form, Jack knocks on the door twice, opens it and closes it and looks back inside the office, He sees a person sitting on a large chair, looking at a picture, he puts the picture down and turns to Jack, the man smiles to Jack and offers him to sit down, and Jack does so. - Jack: " Hello, Mr...? " Mr. Crose: " Crose, Mr. Crose. " Jack: " Well, Mr. Crose, why did you want me here, and more importantly, how did you know i was there? " Mr. Crose: " One question at a time, please, its rude to ask alot of a questions all at once. " Jack: " Allright... Why am I Here? " Mr. Crose: " I called you here, if you wish, i can tell you why. " Jack: " Allright, how do you know i was there? " - Mr. Crose smiles and responds: - Mr. Crose: " Time will reveal the truth, now to tell you why I called you here, you see, there is a brutal force going on around the earth, you've expirianced it for yourself, we want to end it, completly. Your just another recruit to our game, we help every person out of there as we can, untill we can free everyone by taking them out. The U.U is allready looking for you with the rest of the cons, so you will have to join us unless you want to prolly die out there. i'll set you off with Joey, his the guy that brought you here, you'll be under his devision, go to him, he will tell you what to do, got it? " Jack: " Yeah, what do I do if i need to see or talk to you? " Mr. Crose: " Just step by on my office, if its locked, then come back later, everyone is allways welcome. " Jack: " Allright, but one thing though, whats the U.U? " Mr. Crose: " The Universl Union, they are the dictators of todays earth, but we will bring them down, dont you worry. " Jack: " Allright, i'll talk to you later, Mr. Crose. " Mr. Crose: " see you then. " - Jack leaves the office and heads out... - *MEANWHILE* Announcer: " CODE RED! CODE RED! WE HAVE A BREACH! " - A Geared unit runs down to a console threw the large numbers running behind him to positions, he enters the console and types in a few commands, he then presses Enter, and then walks away normally as if nothing happened. - Unit #402: " Look, i have no idea where he is or where he went to... " Unit #381: " This is Serious, 402! if we find him, we might find where everyone else is at, this is heavier than anything you ever did! Direct Orders by High up requires us to find him at all costs, NOW MOVE IT! " Unit #402: " Aye-Aye, sir! " - 402 heads out to his position with the running crowd, and 381 sighs as he starts running slowly to the other side, the camera turns back to Mr. Crose's Office, a phone rings, Crose answers it... - Phone: " Im almost done with my part, how is yours? " Mr. Crose: " Never been better, i'll keep in touch of any suprises. " - Mr. Carson hangs up, and looks at the picture again, as we head out threw the office door, and the screen fades black. - End of Chapter Twenty Three |
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