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| BaZul | May 20 2009, 07:14 AM Post #1 |
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©"If there were no God, It would be necessary to invent Him." --Voltaire Welcome, And Thanks for Entering My Fiction! The Haikasho This Story is a Man who's Life isen't The same as everyone else. We are all Special, But that sentance is diffarant now. Special Has never been the same for him. He is controlled And Possessed, No one knows who they are, though. Reality won't be the same for those who know them, The world will never look the same, and it will never be. But what if that Man, Wants to Break Free, to end it all? This is a Story about a Man Who's Life isen't the Same as Everyone Else's Life. Welcome, Again, To My Fiction. History of My Fiction: ------------------------ I had this Idea in the Age of 10, Its a little idea i came up after looking up at my Own life (Pretty Strange, aint it?), as i looked at the world, and whats it state and What we are trying to do, i started thinking about the good things, but then seen That mostly it aint as i thought, After being linked to "Illuminati Spam", which Ended a few year ago, i decided to make my own Fiction, which was a Machinima Series at first, Due to the 'Full-Life Consequences'. But i figured, how can i start it? i dont know how or have enoff people to instruct Me, I then noticed my English is very strong for a Young Person (as you can see), So i just started writing it in a Notepad, searching somewhere to post it at. I Then went to www.gamesfree.ca , That had a Forum. Then the forum got Human Spammed* untill it was forced to be closed. At the Time, i was reading VGCats (Recommend for peeps who like Game/Movie Parodys And alike), Then after No Updates, i searched for other Webcomics, i found some that i finished not long Ago, and some that i am still tracking, then i Found This, Alone in a Crowd. I loved it, and i signed up to the Forum, and since then, I started Rewriting my Fiction (Correcting Grammer Errors from Notepad) in The Forum. *Human Spammed: Spam not made by Bots, Almsot impossible to stop. ------------------------ Chapter Count - 27 Chapters ------------------------ Also, i am planning to Make a Actual Machinima Series, But not the Fiction, The Fiction Will Stay allways in Text, whilist the Machinima will be Constructed whenever, I will start it when the Fiction is nearing Ending. If you wanna help out, ill be happy To accept any possible aid. Thanks again for Reading My Fiction! Please Tell me how it is and what you think In The Feedbacker Topic! Have Fun! |
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[BλŹuÌ] Alšo КnōwИ As Ŧңe-Ġ-MаŃ Our World. Full of Lies, Conspiracy, Destruction, Illusions. Dont Give In, Free Yourself, Like I Did, Before you Cannot Anymore. Walk Away From Thaier Controll
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| Tom_AIAC | May 20 2009, 07:38 PM Post #2 |
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That reminds me to the opening narration of an 70's or 80's action TV show or something. Interesting! |
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| BaZul | May 21 2009, 05:39 AM Post #3 |
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Chapter One: Beginning of a Era - As we see the sky, a hawk flys above us, and flys over a warehouse, We look at the warehouse and suddenly, *PAFF*!, a Gunfire is heard. a man wearing a overcoat, with his head covered in his hood comes out, he reaches his hand out holding a letter, the hawk we seen goes down and grabs the letter with his claws and starts flying away, the letter opens and reveals itself, The Following Red Coloered Writing On it says: Accept another One. The screen turns fastly to the side, showing a diffarant location. - " Whats Wrong with me? " Asks our Charecter as he walks down a street. " Why am i doing all this? What is this feelings... " He continues. " These Visions, Emotions, Nightmares and hallucinations... " He keeps on. - All of a sudden, a man shows up next to him in a pitch black smoke, from nowhere and starts walking with the man - " So, i assume you did the job? " The Strange man asks our charecter. " Yes, but you know that ages ago, why the hell do you bother me anyways? Does it amuse you or something? " Our Charecter Replys to the man. " No, not at all. i would been happy to leave you alone, truly. But you allready know we cannot do that, you see, We must keep watch... " The man Says back but gets interuppted by our charecter. " Its Allways Us, We or Them! Cant I have a opinion? You allready erase everything I work hard on once my "Job" is done, cant I have a chance to Live more then a week?! " Our Charecter Yells furiously. " Woah! Relax Jack, you allready know we must keep your name in secret, if your name would spread out, you have any idea what will happen... " The strange Man Says to Jack. " Thats my point! you wont even tell me what will happen, you never share anything with me! you allways say "Its not the time" or "You will know when the time is right". When is that time? you never told me that, you never said anything. " Jack Continues. " Its allright Jack, dont you worry. I will tell you everything when your ready, hows that for a answer? " The Strange man says with a smile on his face. - Jack keeps walking with his gear and armor on him, covered in blood. - " Look Jack, we need to Give you your next mission, you know what to do, right? " The Man says " Fine, I'll see you there. " Jack Replys while Sighing. - The Strange man dissapears in the way he came, and Jack Sits down in the middle of the road, as a car drives by fastly, The car comes closer and closer to Jack... Untill it hits him, and his body is sent away from the speed of the car, and when his body is close to reach the floor, the screen stops, the background turns black, and Jack's body is being pulled up to a Cold Metal Chair, he then gets his hands tied up, but nothing seem to hold them, allthough he cant move them. Two men show up infront of him, with thaier Faces In the shadows, they complete eachothers sentances while talking to Jack - " Well Well Well... " The first man says " Look who we got here... " The second continues " How is it going Jack, Is everything allright? Well then... " Says the first man. " We need to relocate you, before they find you again, so we must hurry... " they continue. " We need to find you a place safe enough but close to your next assignment. " " But first, we must... Expand.. our Archives and Collections and other important things, inside of you... " They say. " You will wake up at your next mission, check the drawr in the Desk, find the envelope and read it, once your done reading, dispose of it. and get ready, once your done with that, they may be there, so hurry up to your Destanation, but remember... we wont allways... Be there for you. " They say - Jack is suprised to thaier words, but he cannot say a thing. - " So watch yourself, as you dont know when we are with you... yet. " The First man Says. - Jack Cannot breath all of a sudden, he Is Suffocating, and the two men dissapear, and the screen fades out while Jack remains Suffocating. - End of Chapter One |
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| BaZul | May 26 2009, 07:46 AM Post #4 |
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Chapter Two: Rent Collectors - Jack Wakes up at a bed in the middle of a One Room Apartment, he breaths heavily as he stands up slowly - *** How did i get here? -He Thought to himself. *** They told me to find that Parchment... -He Continued. - Jack Goes to a table slowly, and opens up a drawer, a sealed envilope with a small box is there. Jack Picks up the box and opens it, a Credit Card is there, he takes it and puts it in his wallet. He opens the Envilope, to see a folded Piece of paper, he opens it slowly... But it has nothing written in it, but suddenly Jack stands up, holding his head and stumbling along to apartment. He hits the wall and slides down from it, a vast, deafing sound attack his ears and causes his head to hurt, he cannot hear or see, but only feel the pain from opening the envilope... but it slowly fades away... He gets up and stands in the middle of the room. - *** This is simple enough... -He said to himself. - Suddenly, a small TV on the table turns on by itself, and in the news at the TV there are Police Vans heading to the building Jack is at, The name on the vans are Blurred, as in censored. Jack looks at the closet, he opens it and gets inside, and once he steps in, A huge room reveals, inside the room every single Firearm and Armor is floating or embedded to the walls of the huge bright white room. Jack wears on his gear, with a Mark on it, and picking up Several Weapons, he walks out of the room which turns Black and everything in it disappears. Jack Walks out of the room, and closes the door of the apartment, he looks to his right to see Five well armed units heading towards Jack, on thaier Gear large White letters read M.S.O.F. He Starts running to the left, to discover a few more heading towards his location he wanted to turn to, he quickly changed direction and keeps running from thaier gunfire. as he runs to a turn, a other solider swings his rifle to knock Jack out, but suddenly, everything gets slow untill a stop, a suited man fremiliar to the one we seen earlier, walks by him, moving the rifle upwards with the officer's hands, and walks away, Everything turns slowly back to normal speed and The Unit missed Jack, but another one is behind him right where jack is heading, jumping from a glass roof above him, Jack Slides down and dodges the Man, and jumps into a Laundry chute. He lands on a pile of dirty laundry, he stands up in a ally, to find himslef infront of Two of the Unit's Vans, Jack walks slowly towards the Vans, to see many more Units running towards him, and as the moment they are close, they run past him, and bash the Back entarance and enter the building. Jack smiles, and starts walking in the crowded road, with his gear that no one can see. The screen Fades Slowly out in Black as more Vans and Helicopters appear on the building, and Jack walking away from it. - End Of Chapter Two. |
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| Tom_AIAC | May 26 2009, 05:58 PM Post #5 |
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Nice to see your creative juices flowing there
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| BaZul | May 27 2009, 12:37 AM Post #6 |
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To Tell you the truth, I have Reached Chapter Seven in the original Forum before it got closed due to spam. But yeah, thanks
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[BλŹuÌ] Alšo КnōwИ As Ŧңe-Ġ-MаŃ Our World. Full of Lies, Conspiracy, Destruction, Illusions. Dont Give In, Free Yourself, Like I Did, Before you Cannot Anymore. Walk Away From Thaier Controll
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| BaZul | May 30 2009, 07:29 AM Post #7 |
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Chapter Three: The Wind... - We see a Hawk flying over Jack's head as he goes uphill to a scenic overview. Sadly, the scenic overview has been destroyed by the many factories and facillities spread wide in the landscape. Jack crouches down and takes looks over to a nearby facillity, There are a few guards by as he looks, he looks behind him, checking something, and then under him, after that he starts to slide down from the overview to a deserted road, he looks up to where he was and starts walking towards the facillity. Jack takes out the assault rifle that he picked, and walks back to the side with his back to the wall, looking over the edge to see a guard post right next to the main entarance. He gets ready with his rifle and jumps out from his cover and runs towards the main entarance, he aims at the guard post, to see that its empty. he puts his weapon down and looks carefully, then he starts walking and enters the facillity, we turn back to see that the guard is in the post, appearing from nowhere ocne Jack passed. Jack takes his weapon up to see two guards, he swiftly turns to the wall to hear the talk between them. - Guard 1: " Did you catch today's news at the morning? They said they found where that dude lives, but they dident manage to capture him, the police allways failed to get him, I dont see the effort to catch him. " Guard 2: " Yeah, and I dont really care, im not afraid of him, he isent so tough as far as I seen, maybe a bit crazy, but not scary, I bet he isent a good fighter, but just sneaky. " Guard 1: " Pfft, he would dismemeber you if you get to close, so watch it, I heard that our manager made a few problems with his suppliers. and I think they will hire you know who to get him, that means we are screwed aswell. " Guard 2: " Ha, the only person that will be screwed will be the one guarding his room, just hope it aint you. " Guard 1: " I heard its you, go check in the Break room, im not sure. " Guard 2: " Fine, i'll see you in a bit. " - The guards cross path as the first guard heads towards Jack's cover while the second turns away, as only then the first guard turns and gets grabbed by Jack, he hold him with a knife on his neck, he starts to talk to him... - Jack: " Dont worry, I wont Dismemeber you. For aslong as you keep quiet, becouse it wont do anything good to everyone you see. " Guard 1: " Oh my god, oh my god, what the hell... what the hell do you want? " Jack: " I told you, relax. im looking for your boss. " Guard 1: " It wont be hard to find him, everything you want to know is at the break room, But every three hours there is a break or a duty switch and the people show up there. " Jack: " Is there any more secrets you want to share? " Guard 1: " Only that your going to die a slow and painful death. " Jack: " We will see about that. " - Jack Kills the Guard with his knife, but not hiding the body, as he goes towards the Break room, the body seems to vanish in the same black smoke. Jack opens the door slowly to see no one is there, he checks his watch, it shows ' 15:54 ', Jack quickly heads to the clipboard and checks the Guard posts and Schedule. He discovers that there is one guard guarding the front of the room, and four inside. he goes towards the office with his back to the wall of the hallway. Jack smiles as he sees the man that talked to the last guard he saw, Jack holsters his gun and walks towards the guard, the guard is shocked and takes up his weapon. - Guard 2: " Stand Where you are, Freak! " Jack: " I just need to see your manager. " Guard 2: " If you wont stop, you will have a third eye, you physco. " Jack: " Now, Now. no need for violence, I will just go inside, say hello. and go back out, no trouble. dont you worry. " Guard 2: " Yeah right, you'll go in gun blazing, and I will be in a bodybag, by you or my manager. you stay there and i'll call the cops, if you move you'll die. got that?! " - Jack stops and suddenly Two suited men with a pistol each appear, pointing at the guard, saying to him. - Man 1: " Sir, we demand you to step back... " Man 2: " Our Client, your manager. has ruffled a few feathers in our... Buisness... " Man 1: " If you will not stand down and allow our... Spokesperson to discuss with your Manager, we will have to resort in harmful measures... " Man 2: " So then, Stand down while you can before our Spokesperson will not be pleased. " Guard 2: " No way, this is good money from this lame job, and im not letting you freaks to make me go nuts, this illusion wont get me! Im going to freakin' Blast you to the damn wall! " - One of the suited men shoots the guard in the foot, the guard goes down and grabs his leg, to see that he is acctually bleeding and feeling pain, he also takes the bullet from the floor that went through his leg, and sees that it is very real. - Guard 2: " Holy... " - Before the guard finishes his sentance, the other man shoots him in the head and he drops dead on the ground, Jack is still waiting in the palce he was to see the man dead, he takes out his assault rifle, boots down the door and aims at the managers... ... To Discover only the Manager's Body on the chair. - End of Chapter Three |
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| BaZul | Jun 3 2009, 10:18 AM Post #8 |
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Chapter Four: ...That Come and Goes - Jack Walks around the room, looks around him, looking at the Pinned Guards at the walls, he stops moving infront of the door, looknig at the body of his target in his Chair. Jack looks down, and sees a Hawk with his head cutoff, he notices there is a message slightly loose on the Hawk's leg, Jack slowly takes the letter, to read it. He sees the written 'Another One Is Gone, Accept Him for my Sanity ' Jack is shocked at the written, staring at it with his eyes wide. He closes his eyes and folds the letter, he puts it in his wallet and looks down at the floor, the manager's assualt rifle is there, lying on the ground... clean and shiny in the horror room. Jack takes his leg up to stomp on it, and a Strange Effect in the background appears as Jack Stomps on the rifle, which broke on contact. Jack hears a door closing, he goes to take a look from the office's window, he sees Two of the Vans that we saw Eariler heading inside the facillity, They stop a few meters away from the entarance, a few guards of the facillity head slowly towards them, and suddenly Many Units come out of the Vans, Starting shooting at the grounds and breaking thaier way through in Combat, Destroying Everything in thaier path, Jack looks down, and heads back to the door. As Jack Opens it, a bright white light is seen, Jack goes inside it, and the door closed by itself. Jack Continues on walking as the room starts to turn Dark, to the Black Color he is used to. He looks up to see a Huge Gate, and on them written in a Large, Red Glow... " (H) " Jack thinks what it means, but he stops thinking about it. The Gate opens slightly to allow Jack to enter. After he gets inside, the Gate closes in a large sound and Vanishes, leaving no Exit. Jack stands still, to see a spotlight on him, and a Chair slides towards him and stops as he falls on it, captivated to it... Sitting... - Man #1: " Why, That was a Unpleasent Ending, eh? " -A Suited man Walks towards Jack. Jack: " You allready know that, dont you? Why you act like you dont? " Man #1: " No need for Questions, answers are allready unfolded, no need to ask. " Jack: " I see no answers, just messed up shit. " - The suited man steps forward, to Reveal his face - Man #1: " Well then, i guess you still Havent Figured it out. " Jack: " That this world is a mess? Everyone knows that. " Man #1: " Really? Then why hasen't anyone done anything about it? " Jack: " Becouse Thaier eaither Too Greedy, Lazy, Stupid or any other reason. " - The man Laughs quietly - Man #1: " No, Jack. That is not the reason. " Jack: " Then what is? " Man #1: " The Most Obvious, Its us. We do not want it to change. " Jack: " Well your Interests will make the world destroy by itself. " - The man laughs quietly again - Man #1: " So we are making Progress, are we? " Jack: " Well, i dont really care. I came here for a reason. " Man #1: " Yes, i know. you want a Timeoff again, like last time, For what is it this time. Friends? Vacation? Updating yourself with the world's chaotic newsflashes and reports?... " Jack: " Yes, i guess Updating myself with the world will be good way to explain it. " Man #1: " Well then, your Dismissed, i will... Contact... you when your time off is up. " - Jack Suddenly stands up, as he is no longer bound by the Suited man's Power or the chair's power. Jack turns around and starts walking away from the man in the spotlight with the chair, Jack slowly turns out to walk in a large crowed, next to a few residence Buildings. Jack starts thinking... - *** Time to find out who these guys are... but they will know what Im doing, I should search in a diffarant route... I need to find out who are those guys that are after me are. - Jack starts walking with the crowd, as the camera goes away from him, to reavel the very large crowd he is at... and fades black. - End Of Chapter Four |
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| BaZul | Jun 6 2009, 06:27 AM Post #9 |
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Chapter Five: Classified *** What the Hell is going on?! I cant find anything about them... - Jack sighs as he sits at a Internet Cafe. Jack takes his hand and rubs it in his forehead, trying to think how to even get started. - *** Everything I tried, everything I typed in a searched, went to nothing. just random crap. all i know is that they are called ' M.S.O.F ', but what the hell does it stand for? - Jack is starting to have a headache, he stands up and walks away from the Cafe, he wanders at a less crowded road, seing the cars that pass by. He looks around him to see the world, mugging, theft, beating and killing, cursing and fighting... Jack is shocked to find that the things he seen in the past are gone or worsen. Jack keeps on walking, as his side start to hurt. He continues anyway, ignoring the pain, which seem to do anything to him while he was with the suited man as he walked down the street from last time. His other side begins to hurt slightly aswell, but he continues to ignore. - *** What the hell is gonig on?, why am I having this pain, all over my body... - Jack begins to limp threw the streets as everyone watches him, but not in the manner of fear, more in the manner of laughter. Jack hides his face from the public, in fear of someone recodnizing him, to stumble down on the ground, everyone sorrounding him and he dosent look up, he trys to get up, but he cannot. Jack starts to see Black wrapping around him, he is being called back to them. Jack is still on the ground, but no longer where he was. - Man #1: " Im sorry I had to call you in here like that, but there is a problem. " - Jack wonders what the suited man is talked about. - Man #1: " We have... a breach... " - Jack's eyes open from shock, and he stands up like nothing happend, and the screen fades black as his face is shadowed at the spotlight. - End of Chapter Five -------------- Notes: MSOF: Multisystem Organ Failure -------------- |
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| BaZul | Jun 8 2009, 09:05 AM Post #10 |
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Chapter Six: The Penetrator Jack: " What do you mean we got a breach? " - Jack asked the suited men, while still not being in full controll by him. - Man #1: " Well... its hard to explain really, i allways had a soft spot for you, so i wanted to warn you, i suppose you are amazed we dident know about this thing long back, but listen, becouse of this breach, we cannot contact you allways or have any sort of handleing with whatever you do, So be carefull. " - Jack looked at the man - Jack: " What do you mean 'whatever you do'? Am I that bad as me? are you taking me as a monster? What the hell is this, just because your not in full controll of me means I can flip the world upside down?! " - Jack yelled at the suited man in anger. The room slowly turns slightly red. - Man #1: " Relax Jack, do not worry, dont take it the wrong way, Im just informing you, thats all... " Jack: " I dont need you to inform me! Infact, im leaving... I'll see you later. " - Jack interupts and walks away, for some reason he is no bound. The room returns Black with a spotlight at where Jack was and Another man appears. - Man #2: " The breach reached this area? " - The first suited man sighs - Man #1: " ...Yes... " - Jack walks down a street looking on the ground he walks on. - *** Who do they think they are, to do whatever they want with me, one day I'll... - Suddenly, someone puts a hand on Jack's shoulder - ???: " You, turn around. " - Jack turns around with a angry face. - Jack: " You better have a good reason to bothor me. Whats your name, Speak now. " Din: " You can call me Din, now comeon, we have to go now. " Jack: " Pfft, what a name. I am not going anywhere untill you will explain yourself Now. " Din: " I was right there..." -Din points at a place close to a ally Jack came from- "... I saw you show up from the ally, allthough before, i looked there, and it was empty. just a checked the time for one second and your there... " Jack: " Just a coincidence, dont flatter yourself. " Din: " I saw the black smoke trail... " - Jack Looks stright into Din's eyes - Jack: " What should make me not kill you right now, and I suppose you allready know what happens to the people I kill in public. " Din: " Yes i know. but listen, i got a reason. " Jack: " Which is? " Din: " Freedom. " - Jack looks at Din. - Jack: " You dont mean... your incharge of... " - Din nods once - End Of Chapter Six |
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| BaZul | Jun 12 2009, 02:12 PM Post #11 |
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Chapter Seven: Getting to know Jack: "So... 'Din', What do you actually do?" Din: "Well, its hard to explain really, it will take a long time for me to get it right." - Jack and Din walk at a large hallway, heading to a door far away. - Jack: "How do you know about me?... better yet, how do you know about them?" Din: "You are not the only one under thaier controll, you know..." Jack: "Yes, they have told me that." Din: "Really? becouse they usually keep everything to themselves." Jack: "So i've seen, so you mean you managed to free yourself from them?" Din: "Not really, you see... my father was controlled by them..." - Jack looks at Din as they continue walking. - Din: "There ain't really much to tell, he was a superhuman. Everyone looked at him as a hero, atleast in the place I was at, sadly I can't find it at any map. They managed to erase it from existence the moment I ran away..." Jack: "..Ran away? from what?" Din: "My Father, what else? He allways went into a room in our house, he wouldent let me or my mom enter it, it was where he could do whatever he wanted, to be with them... alone." - Din stops walking, looking at the ground - Din: "He started talking to himself, going insane slowly and slowly... one night, I heard a shout and woke up to see what happend... I found him infront of my mother's corpse with his combat knife. then he said 'Dont worry, son... you'll understand in time'. then I knew that he ment I was going to be controlled by them aswell..." Jack: "Is this thing hereditary or something?" Din: "I hope not, or else the entire world is... infected with them." Jack: "Your taking them as a disease..." Din: "You know what they did to you... i mean..." - Jack looks at Din and says - Jack: "Yes, I do know what they did to me... there is no need to get back at that sort of pain." Din: "Look, I dident mean to..." Jack: "Its allright, comeon, You said we are almost to that place you wanted to show me." Din: "Yeah... Look, I wanted to tell you this; I've been following you for a reason, as you just stated you know that there are millions of people like my father, worse or a bit better.. in some way. but there is only You... Something is diffarant about you, you arent like the rest of the controlled. They express themselves to you, they explain to you. the teach you and warn you and inform you... they allow you to take a break from thaier controll and give you privileges that no one will ever have." Jack: "All what you says dosent make me special, they have a soft spot for me or something, perhaps its my effectivness and efficiency or something..." Din: "No Jack, it aint that... you are more then you think. I've studied you, you are capable of making anything you wish... you can be God himself if you want to. Thats why they have a soft spot for you... they fear you, so they think its best for you to be... um... lets say 'Comfortable'?" Jack: "Heh, you make things sounds so good even when they cant be right." Din: "How can you prove that Im wrong?" Jack: "If what you say is correct, why havent they came to kill you and get me back becouse you exposed something so huge to me, and they dont want it to happen?" Din: "They will never allow me to talk to you, infact we have limited time untill I cant anymore." Jack: "The Breach... thats the reason..." Din: "Yes..." - Jack and Din are infront of a wooden door - Din: " You want to come inside? " Jack: " Am I allowed? " Din: " Ofcourse, Come on in. " - Din opens the door to a very dark room, Jack enters and The door closed. Footsteps are heard, as a man steps a bit away from the door. and starts walking to the other side with his face hidden by his hood. - End of Chapter Seven |
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| BaZul | Jun 12 2009, 02:14 PM Post #12 |
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| BaZul | Jun 15 2009, 01:15 PM Post #13 |
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Chapter Eight: He Was Unlocked Jack: "Why is it so dark in here?" Din: "Dont worry. Here, I'll turn on the lights..." - Din turns on the light to reveal a nice little home, comfortable and safe... A home that Jack could never have. - Jack: "Wow..." Din: " 'Wow' what? this is my home, and from now on, this is you're home aswell." Jack: "I dont know what to say... Thanks?" Din: "Your Welcome." - Jack Walks around the House... Amazed. While we go to a other scene... - Man #1: "I found him." Man #2: "Then where is he?" Man #1: "He isent with me, he is with him." Man #2: "Din?!" Man #1: "Yes, Im sorry sir." Man #2: "Dont worry, we just need to get our hands on him. it wont be hard." Man #1: "Are you sure? you know what he can do..." Man #2: "Oh, dont worry... He is with Din now." Man #1: "Hm, i suppose. When will we take action?" Man #2: "Soon... Trust me, we dont need to haste. We will wait for the Perfect Timing" Man #1: "Allright, Sir." - We Return to Jack as he sits on the Couch - Jack: "To tell you the truth, i expected a huge Group of people here working hard as hell." Din: "Why would you think so?" Jack: "Well, Firstly... you Breached them, and Found me." Din: "True, but have you forgot they can See Everything?" Jack: "Ah yeah, Wait... so why havent they did anything about you becouse im here?" Din: "Becouse im a flaw in thaier System." Jack: "What do you mean?" Din: "Well, i was supposed to be you, the Perfect... Subject... But something went wrong." Jack: "What did? they can detect flaws in the future and fix them." Din: "They dident Expect the Flaw to affect me, It was my father... Remember what i told you? The moment i saw him killing my mother, That thing in my mind opend, and i was... well... Unlocked, you can say." Jack: "Unlocked? What do you mean by that?" Din: "Hm... Well, imagine Two Brothers, One Young and one Older. The older has a Box, and he can lock and unlock it with a key... The Older Brother Stashed the Key somewhere unknown and almost impossible to get by his Little brother, and he placed something important to His Little Brother. The Brother managed to find the key, and free whatever was in the box." Jack: "We are all that Little Brother... and thaier that Big Brother, Right?" Din: "Correct." Jack: "So why cant they find you?" Din: "Im invisible to them, you can say. and everything around me isent bound by them, and they cant monitor it." Jack: "So im safe of thaier controll from them if im with you? Sweet." Din: "No, Not sweet. Becouse i can do that, everyone around me will have... Some sort of Effect on them, weakness or something... It depends on the person.." Jack: "So im screwed or not?" Din: "Thats the problem, and thats what i plan to fix." Jack: "How?" Din: "We are going to try to Unlock you too." End of Chapter Eight |
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| BaZul | Jun 19 2009, 02:15 PM Post #14 |
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Chapter Nine: Fall Down... Forever. - Jack Looks at Din and Replys - Jack: "Get me... Unlocked? How is that possible?" Din: "We dont know, thats the problem. Seeing my Mother murderd by my father made me go into Rage, and eventually Unlocked... i remember the feeling." Jack: "Well i dont have any Father or Mother, and i dought seeing someone get killed will work out, as i am a killer myself." Din: "True, To make sure that they will fall down... forever, is that to make you a unlocked person and free from thaier controll for good." Jack: "You think i am the reason they are still able to do what they are able to?" Din: "No Exactly, as you probably know, they have many strings and they have many people under thaier controll, some of them we dont know, and what we do know for sure is you. So i suppose they gave you some sort of... Upgrade, that made you better then the rest, but ofcourse, if there is a Upgrade, there is a Downgrade. And while doing that Little part of the Downgrade that allows thaier controll, you will be a Free minded, Unlocked." Jack: "Sounds Risky, not to mention they can get involved with your idea, we dont know how to make me a Unlocked person." Din: "We will find out sooner or Later." Jack: "I Hope so, we dont really got a choice now, do we?" - Someone Knocks on the door. - Din: "Quickly! Hide!" -Din Whispers to Jack As he hides himself- - Din Opens the door, to see Two men infront of it, Both of them hooded wearing black Jackets. - Din: "Why, Hey there Rayne, Whats up?" Rayne: "Nothing much, man. mind if a come in?" Din: "No Problem, What about Ken? is he comeing in too?" Rayne: "Nah, he just walked me here, he is going somewhere else." Din: "Ah, well come right in." - Din Escorts Rayne to the couch, thaier both sitting on it while Jack is hiding carefully below it. - Din: "Brotherhood giving you a hard time?" - Rayne Sighs - Rayne: "Yeah, they got me and Ken doing Searchs for The dude, The guy in the news..." Din: "Him?! what are they thinking? That maniac will rip you to shreds!... Um... No offence ofcourse." Rayne: "None Taken, So we have been all night searching for him, and im pretty Tired so i came by to check up on you before i head back to the Brotherhood's Quarters." - Din looks outside the window to discover it is night. - *** Did the time passed so quickly? - Thinks Din to himself. Rayne: "Anyways, have you seen anything? becouse i gotta go before i'll attract any sort of attention to you." Din: "No, not at all. Sorry." Rayne: "Its cool, dont worry about it. if you see something though, contact me." Din: "Will do, oh yeah, tell Ken to drop by Next week, he never took back his gun, and im afraid someone will know about it and try to rob me, you know these streets..." Rayne: "Good point, i'll tell him, see you later." Din: "Bye." - Rayne goes out and closes the door. - Din: "You can come out now, i think he left." - Jack gets out from his cover. - Jack: "Who is that?" Din: "Oh, Rayne? he is a old friend of mine, we are very close, i know him for years, he was just a little older from me and he kept me company when my parents warent home." Jack: "Allright, so what do we do now?" Din: "Well, Firstly, you gotta go. I cant allow you to stay here, You will attract too much attention to me." Jack: "I cant just go out there like that, after all this time they might be searching for me." Din: "Oh yeah, right... Here, take this key, it will open that drawr, take the pistol from there, its a very good one, keep it." Jack: "Is that 'Ken's Pistol?" Din: "I'll tell him i got robbed over night." Jack: "Allright, is there any way i can Contact you later?" Din: "Search for The Brotherhood of Freedom. You'll find me eventually, allright?" Jack: "Ok, Goodbye." - Jack takes the Pistol from the drawr and leaves, Finding himself now infront of a Very large building on a empty street at night... - End of Chapter Nine |
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| BaZul | Jun 23 2009, 02:06 PM Post #15 |
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Chapter Ten: The Pistol - Jack Walks in the Empty road, udner light of Lightpoles, Such silence is heard. Jack takes out the Pistol Din gave him, he turns it around, and sees a strange engraving on the gun's Barrel, Saying "Sanity". Jack Smiles for the coincidence, as he hears a footstep infront of him, He looks up to see Rayne. - Rayne: " I Finally Found you." Jack: " You want a cookie?" Rayne: " Very Funny, No. im going to take you back to us." Jack: " And who is 'Us' Exactly?" Rayne: " Why, Its the Brotherhood." Jack "... Of Freedom? I thought they wer good." Rayne: " How would you know about it? its secret and your... controlled... you..." Jack: "... Shouldnet know about these things, Face it. Im Special." Rayne: " Not for long your not, your going to be just like every other person." Jack: " And how can that be? what can you do?" Rayne: "... This." - Rayne Takes up his hand and points it at Jack, he opens his hand and suddenly the City fades away to the darkness of the night, its the same room seen when the Suited men are talking to Jack... - Jack: " What The?! How did you..." Rayne: " Suprised? In here, you are worthless. You arent Special, you dont even know how to walk... Its all thaier Controll, And now i sent you to it. But this time it is diffarant, this is a room they dont know about... This... is MY Room." End of Part One of Chapter Ten |
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| BaZul | Jun 26 2009, 03:43 PM Post #16 |
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Chapter Ten: The Pistol of Sanity Jack: " What do you mean its 'Your Room'?! This dosent make any sense?! " Rayne: " And what Din says makes sense? it dosent, but thats what special about him, everyone gets some sort of effect. your is understanding, your lucky. " Jack: " Wait, you knew? " Rayne: " All the time. " Jack: " Why dident you just kill me then? it would have saven you time. " Rayne: " I dident want Din to do something to me, who else can he trust? " Jack: " Perhaps me? have you thought of that? " Rayne: " You?! Ha! yeah right, your a walking disaster, your the least to be trusted on, your Crazy. " Jack: " Am I? " - Jack Pulls up The pistol Din gave him and aims it at Rayne - Rayne: " Where the hell you got that?! " Jack: " From the guys that broke into Din's house. i bought it for a nice price. " Rayne: " Oh yeah? what price? " Jack: " Your life. " - As Jack pulls the trigger, nothing happens and the pistol dosent shoot - *** What the hell?! -Jack thinks for himself - Jack notices that Rayne is somewhat injured - Jack: " What is this pistol?! it dosent work! " Rayne: " You Asshole, That thing is worse then you think, it makes people go insane, wishing for that pistol will return back its sanity, and doing what a pistol does best, Killing, to get thaier sanity back. " Jack: " Your like me now, eh? " Rayne: " No, this is my room, things work diffarantly, nothing can hurt me. " Jack: " Why are you in pain then? " Rayne: " Im not, its a sideeffect when one of thaier rooms takes Damage, and right becouse you did that, you will be back to thaier Claws. and im leaving you here. " Jack: " Wait! What are you doing?! " Rayne: " Sadly we cannot fight now, i have other things to attend to. Im trapping you in here so that your Rullers will return to pick you up. " - Jack looks at Rayne with a angry face as he Vanishes in White scorch of smoke in the dark endless room. - *** Shit, that coward... im now fucked becouse now they know im here... - Jack Turns around to see the same person that walked with Jack and informed him about the Breach - Suited Man #1: " Well, i suppose sneaking dosent work out with you. " Jack: " Im screwed anyways, if you want to hurry up things, have fun. " Suited Man #1: " Why should i do something like that? you helped us, now we can Track down the man you confronted right now, and end him. Wasent that your Intention? " - Jack looks at the white Scroch at the Endless Dark room, and smiles. - Jack: " He thought he left me... And now he has another thing comeing. " End of Chapter Ten |
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| BaZul | Jun 29 2009, 04:07 AM Post #17 |
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Chapter Eleven: History Lesson - Jack stands in the endless dark room, behind him They start to show up in large groups, one of them steps forward - Man #1: " What Makes you come here, Jack? " Jack: " Oh you allready know, its not funny anymore. " Man #1: " Yes, you managed to find us Rayne, but that still dosent allow you to get away with your inappropriate entry here. " - Jack turns around and faces the man, behind him the large group, all looking quite similar - Jack: " Where is here? This is a abyss, a Void. " Man #1: " This Void is still a place, and you are here, in it. " Jack: " I would like to know more about you... All of you. " Man #1: " I think you are in the right time to know more about us, Lets have a small History Session. " Jack: " Allright, im listening. " - The man clears his throat and starts to explain - You see Jack, we are a very large group of people that has a special abillities, Such as The abillity to controll, posses and rule. We work in many ways, usually threw the mind, we started as a hidden Community, long time back, in the start of everything, but we actually started to Make decisions around the beginning of Civilazation. In the ages of Sword and Arrow, back then, we starded forming factions and Public communities, Dark Brotherhoods and Scinister Groups, formed for the Destruction and manipulation of the physical Realm, while we ruled everything in Secret, they thought the controll all of it, secretly ofcourse, But we controlled Them, and even without them knowing about it. After some time, they knew about us and wanted freedom of thaier mind, we had No choice but to end it, and begin the new Era with them forgotten. We then evolved into physical form after a few good timelines, to be able to...advance... our abillities, and Our...Agency... was named "The Black Agency", or the B.A . We wer opposed by traitors and people that seeked freedom once again, They managed to remember thaier past and go for the same goal thaier predecessors. Not only they wanted Thaier minds... unlocked... they wanted physical Freedom Aswell. They formed thaier own group, Due To The Fact they had abillites and capabilities we granted them, and they formed ' The White Agency ', or 'The Enlighted', and They Still Remain untill this day, Named "The Illuminati", Controlling a very small part of The world, while they think the controll most of it. We found many Troubles in that idea of being in person, physically. so we destroied the B.A. And returned to what we did best, controlling the spirit and mind. We dident change our name as the W.A. did, we remained the same name as We allways had, And that name was The Haikasho The Haikasho, A Name from our ancient language, no one knows our language Unless we Allow Them to know, and no one was premitted. Only repsected or High Authority Members amongst The Entire Haikasho could have the option to learn, and i chose to. Hai (Hi - emphasis on 'Ha'), Meaning Rullers, Controllers and a title for a person incharge. Ka (Quick, like Ca in Canada), Meaning ' Of ' and Sho (Like 'Sh' and 'oh', Almost like 'Show' without 'W'), Meaning Everything, the Whole, all the parts. We are The Haikasho, and we will allways be. The Rullers of Everything, The People incharge of whatever You do, See, hear.. Even Taste and feel. We know Everything about Everything, we decide about Everything, wer incharge of Everything. And we allways been, and nothing will allow it to change. Jack: " Now that you shared me your History, what are you going to do know? " Man #1: " Im going to think of a Reasonable Punishment for your inappropriate entarance to This void, This is a lesson of History, Thus im not explaining other then what i just said. You will be waiting for our decision. " - The Metal Chair slides towards Jack and forces him to sit on it, His hands are cuffed once again to the chair with a unusual force The people walk away into the darkness, and Jack remains there, waiting for his Punishment. - End of Chapter Eleven |
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| BaZul | Jul 7 2009, 05:57 AM Post #18 |
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Chapter Twelve: The Breakout - Jack sits in the chair waiting for them to give him his punishment, the chair slowly Starts to Vaproize, Jack then notices and he falls on the ground and steps up. Jack looks infront of him to see the same man that talked to him before the rest Showed up - Man: " Quick, we dont have much time. " Jack: " Its you again, who are you? " Man: " You can call me Manica. " Jack: " Ok, Manica, What is that name? " Manica: " You see, every Person inside The Haikasho Does not have a name, So they give us a name to our Duty, mine is a small part of 'Maintain'. In other words, The Chair and how it works is all My Work. " Jack: " I Dont know if i should be angry, you know how painful it is? " Manica: " I made it, i know more then you, it has way more power then you think " Jack: " Ok, but why did you free me? " Manica: " You gotta get out of here, thats why. " Jack: " Wait, I never seen this behaviour... " Manica: " Its becouse we are all controlled, even ourselves, we are controlled by a higher Power, i managed to free myself from it, No time for that now, though. You must get out of here before they notice you! " Jack: " How am i supposed to escape The Void? " Manica: " Thats up to you, i can only Free you from The Chair, becouse thats all I Can do. " Jack: " Your incharge of A Chair? " Manica: " No, im Incharge of all the Tools that Restrict and Maintain The People we Controll. " Jack: " There are more here?! " Manica: " We got no time for this, they will be here soon to give you your Punishment, Quick, take this. " - Manica Hands out The 'Sanity' Pistol to Jack - Manica: " Shoot me with it, its the only thing that has a chance to kill me. " Jack: " Why should i kill you? You are saving me, i think. " Manica: " I am, but the fate i will get is worse then anything we made Humans to Think about, Plus, it would make your escape have a backup reason. " Jack: " Smart, but will it mean you will die? " Manica: " I Hope not, becouse then there is no way youll be free again if you get Cought. " Jack: " Allright... " - Jack takes the pistol from Manica's Hand - Jack: " I owe you one. " Manica: " You sure do, But let me Open up your exit. " - Manica opens up a a Exit from the Black Room, the Exit is in a Very bright white Color, Jack Then shoots Manica with The 'Sanity' Pistol, and then runs to the Exit, to end up in a Endless Hall, He starts running searching for a exit. Back to where he was, the rest show up and look at Manica's Corpse. - Man #1: " He helped him Escape. " Man #2: " Is he alive? " Man #1: " Yes, We will make sure he will get Jack's Punishment aswell as his own. In the meantime, Activate The Emergency Lockdown, Do Not Let Him Escape. " Man #2: " Ill tell Carcer. " Man #1: " Quickly! " - Jack Hears a Alarm, He looks back to see a Red color taking over the White Hall From afar, He starts running Forward as the Red takes over from behind him, He Then Bashes a door and closes it from the other side, And he sees himself infront Of a Apartment Building Front Doors. - Jack: " Allright, now i need to Find Din, Time to go to the Brotherhood. " End Of Chapter Twelve |
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| BaZul | Jul 11 2009, 12:37 PM Post #19 |
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Chapter Thirteen: Searching For The Brotherhood - Jack Walks around the street, everyone looks at him as he walks by... He is no longer under the Anonymity that The Haikasho Gave Him, He looks around the city, his eyes are half closed becouse its very bright. Jack looks up to see a big office building, he sees on the top in a large sign: " B.O.F. Inc. " *** Brotherhood of Freedom... - Jack thinks to himself. - - Jack goes inside, to see a secretary handling stuff, not even looking on Jack. - Jack: " Excuse me, can i ask where i am? " Secretary: " Your in 'Banners & Ornaments Fundery Inc.' What do you need? " Jack: " Is there someone named 'Din' Here? " - The secretary stops and stays in he position - Secretary: " You should head to the Thirteen Floor, The last office in the hall. " Jack: " Thank you. " - The secretary dosent respond and trys to distract herself with work, attempting to forget. - - Jack Goes up to the Thirteen Floor, a very long hall is there, it seems fremilliar. Jack goes towards a door at the end of the hall, Jack opens the door, its very dark, he goes inside and closes the door. Jack turns the switch and the lights go on, and Jack finds himself back in Din's House. - Jack: " Din? " - Jack Says out loud in the house. - Din: " Hey, Come upstairs, quickly! " - Jack Goes up very fast to Din, he is at a office, looking at a computer. - Jack: " What is it? You sounded Urgent. " Din: " We are totaly screwed, i dident even think you would have managed to find me, After what Rayne did to you... " Jack: " You know that? " Din: " He Told me... im shocked you managed to escape, but dont worry, he said That just during a Brotherhood meeting, Your very lucky. " Jack: " Lucky? The Haikasho is after me, im exposed, and i can die, Im very lucky indeed. " Din: " Your looking it at the bad way... Here, let me explain. You can now do everything you want, i managed to allow you to have all your Powers or Gifts or whatever, sadly your still killable. You will be seen in public in only one way, your true self and not as someone else. Also, they dont controll you now, they are after you, this gives us a good time to Counter them, and bring them down! " Jack: " You still dreamin' about that?! Dude, it will take a long time 'till we can do That, but untill then, im screwed, becouse they are too powerful! " Din: " Relax, we need to put you in a place with the Brotherhood, Its time to go Out in Public, or atleast some of it. " End of Chapter Thirteen |
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